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Post by Dutchy on Mar 17, 2007 15:18:53 GMT -5
A cruel feeling inside, A cold feeling on the ouside, A scary feeling following me, A painfull feeling haunting me, A feeling that makes me feel like I'll explode,
A bad feeling, felt by me 'till I die, A feeling where the love is missing, A feeling breaking me, A feeling shaking me,
A feeling that you're around
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Post by Tyrant Cecelia on Mar 18, 2007 10:46:28 GMT -5
You start out the same way in every line
A One . . . Two . . . You Left Me . . .
It's to repetitive I think and I personally think it hinders the poem but that's just my opinon.
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Post by Dutchy on Mar 18, 2007 10:49:12 GMT -5
ok thanks anyway
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Post by TML on May 21, 2007 19:23:22 GMT -5
DUTCHY!!! Let's BRING THIS TO LIFE ONCE MORE!!! Come on, dude. *puppy eyes* I'm Loveless right now.....I need it...Let's let it all out through this thread. Come on Bro!!!
Life Has strange ways They are all just so hard to explain Everything comes at you so fast But at times they feel like they will always last These things are incredible But at times horrible That I don't even know....... Anything any more
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Post by Dutchy on May 22, 2007 13:37:49 GMT -5
Did you wrote that? it's nice
She likes to talk in Al Behd, She had more than one b-day thread, She’s always sweet, She’s someone you would love to meet,
I’m talking about my forum child, Games like RE4 or FFX get her wild, So does demon hunter, A wicked band with a singer and grunter =O.
Hok we all love you to keep it short and clean: HAPPY BIRTHDAY! And now you’re 14 =)
^^ was my last poem written for hok's 14th birthday ^-^
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Post by Chevalier Vi Liberté on May 22, 2007 17:16:42 GMT -5
Pretty nice stuff your writiing here Dutchy and Paperheart. Keep going at it.
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Post by TML on May 22, 2007 19:01:41 GMT -5
Did you wrote that? it's nice She likes to talk in Al Behd, She had more than one b-day thread, She’s always sweet, She’s someone you would love to meet, I’m talking about my forum child, Games like RE4 or FFX get her wild, So does demon hunter, A wicked band with a singer and grunter =O. Hok we all love you to keep it short and clean: HAPPY BIRTHDAY! And now you’re 14 =) ^^ was my last poem written for hok's 14th birthday ^-^ Yeah, I wrote that. I love you're poem. How sweet of you to write a poem for her. Pretty nice stuff your writiing here Dutchy and Paperheart. Keep going at it. Um...Yeah, thanks.
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Post by taiyo *on limited hiatus* on May 22, 2007 19:23:35 GMT -5
Woah! . You two are amazing! I gotta give you two karma. *karmas one and then karmas the other when hour is up*
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Post by Dutchy on May 23, 2007 0:32:15 GMT -5
thanks taiyo and thanks dreamer i'll make a new one soon
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Post by taiyo *on limited hiatus* on May 23, 2007 19:40:50 GMT -5
I look forward to them, Darth Dutchy. *karmas TML* Sorry it took so long.
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Post by TML on May 23, 2007 20:55:39 GMT -5
OH, THANKS TAIYO!!! It's all good don't say sorry. You don't have to.
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Post by mcdefenseless on May 23, 2007 21:23:01 GMT -5
^^Wow you guys are good poets. *makes me want to post poetry*
Remind me in like.... 2 hours and I'll karmalize!!!!!
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Post by TML on May 23, 2007 21:28:21 GMT -5
Omg!!! Yo Dutchy. We're good. XP Nah...I give the credit to THE DUTCHY.
That poem that I wrote is probably nothing compared to what I have done. Though I don't think it's as good as Dutchy's. Hey Dutchy I'll pm you the ones that I have done.
Dang it...My friend has the blue notebook where we share our poems.
Everybody who wants to post a poem is welcomed to do so. Don't you think so, bro?
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Post by Chevalier Vi Liberté on May 23, 2007 23:08:37 GMT -5
I will post a poem like you guys sooner or later. I had to write one on my final exam in EnglishIIH today but I forgot it now. On top of that, there is no way I can get it back until next school year. Oh well. That means I have to write something that comes to me.
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Post by Poetic_Tragedy on May 23, 2007 23:49:37 GMT -5
Wow i love your poem its really good
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