Ilise
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w00t, it's Jun
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Jul 25, 2008 13:38:18 GMT -5
Post by Ilise on Jul 25, 2008 13:38:18 GMT -5
EGGhhHhh SAD *sobs* Please update this story. Please do so. Oh, and by the way, when you punctuate quotes, it's like this: instead of: “I’m home, mother.” Toph whispered, it should be: "I'm home, mother," Toph whispered. It's a comma, not a period. Since, however, you didn't use that much dialogue, it didn't detract from the piece. Keep going! =)
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Ilise
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w00t, it's Jun
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Jul 30, 2008 16:49:22 GMT -5
Post by Ilise on Jul 30, 2008 16:49:22 GMT -5
Aw, poor Suki. She feels so out of the loop. XD Yesss! I can't wait to see what Iroh has to say. That was a nice touch, by the way, making it be written by him. Hm, isn't a 'yuan' a type of currency? Lawl. Anyway. I can't wait until the next post!
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