Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Oct 29, 2007 19:39:02 GMT -5
Oh, great fic. ^^ *karma* We need more dark Azuki fics. I believe you are allowed write mature content here, but you can't post it directly. You'd have to put it up on Fanfiction.net/AFFN and link to it with a clear warning. Of course, then I probably couldn't read it lol... Just keep writing it the way you want to. I hope to read more! Yeah, but the problem with FanFiction.net is that you can't write them directly there, you have to upload them. And that means I'd have to type the story up on my computer, save it, upload it to FanFiction.net, delete the original from my computer's files to keep storage space on my hard drive at a maximum, THEN come here and post a link to the story with a clear warning. All that work, when I can just write it as clean as possible and post it here in the first place. And I'm glad you like my story. If someone can guess correctly the basics of the content of the next chapter of the story by the first Tuesday following the release of the previous chapter, I will post the next chapter on that Friday as opposed to that Sunday. You have until 7 tomorrow evening to guess.
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historyman12
Fugitive Iroh
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Post by historyman12 on Oct 30, 2007 16:14:50 GMT -5
I don't know WHAT made you think this chapter wasn't good, because I personally believed it was just as kick Equus asinus as the first. I especially like how you've potrayed the captor/captive relationship between Azula and Suki at this point, and Azula is awesomely IC. Looking forward to chapter 3! ^^ Thank you for your kind words. If there were no content restrictions, the story would be alot more sexual, and to be honest with you, this story, as I write it, has the potential to be a very good erotic novel, but you have the fact that young children view this board as well as people who are offended by sexual content to take into account. I'm glad you like it, and it makes me happy that you look forward to what happens next, but it saddens me that I can't write this story the way I want it to be. as well as people who really don't give a d*** about that stuffand it could be a good anything.
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Oct 30, 2007 20:17:23 GMT -5
Thank you for your kind words. If there were no content restrictions, the story would be alot more sexual, and to be honest with you, this story, as I write it, has the potential to be a very good erotic novel, but you have the fact that young children view this board as well as people who are offended by sexual content to take into account. I'm glad you like it, and it makes me happy that you look forward to what happens next, but it saddens me that I can't write this story the way I want it to be. as well as people who really don't give a d*** about that stuffand it could be a good anything. Oh... kaaay... No real idea how to take that, so I'll file it under constructive criticism.
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historyman12
Fugitive Iroh
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Post by historyman12 on Oct 31, 2007 15:35:34 GMT -5
as well as people who really don't give a d*** about that stuffand it could be a good anything. Oh... kaaay... No real idea how to take that, so I'll file it under constructive criticism. it's a compliment.
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Oct 31, 2007 19:16:16 GMT -5
Oh... kaaay... No real idea how to take that, so I'll file it under constructive criticism. it's a compliment. Oh? Didn't really seem like it at first, but now that I read it, I guess it is.
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Nov 3, 2007 22:09:27 GMT -5
I know. I'm one to talk about not double-posting, when here I am doing it myself. Well, when you're writing a multichapter fic, sometimes it's unavoidable, right? Well, in celebration of the second Azuki Pride Parade thread, I decided to update my story with Chapter 3 tonight, Saturday November 3, 2007. So without further ado, let's get this show on the road. I warn you now, it's a bit long.
Chapter 3: Obedience
Azula hugged Suki close. She had taken her love slave to bed with her the previous night, and they fell asleep in a fond embrace of each other. Now, it was slightly before dawn, and Azula was awake, so she hugged Suki close to her and felt the body heat of the girl. Suki shifted when she felt Azula's arms around her, but didn't wake. After a short while, the girl did wake, but only because her captor had touched a sensitive spot.
"Oohh," Suki said weakly as she awoke. "Is it time to wake up already?"
"I'm sorry. I didn't mean to wake you," Azula half lied. She wasn't sorry, but she really didn't intend to wake her love slave.
"It's alright, My Fire Lady, Azula," Suki said, stretching, feeling Azula's body against her own.
My Fire Lady, Azula the princess of the Fire Nation thought to herself at hearing Suki say those words How long has it been since I had her start calling me that? How long since I broke her? She tried to think of it, but her slave cuddled close to her and she dismissed the thoughts. "Did you sleep well, my little doll?" she purred, and the girl only nodded. "It's not yet dawn, so we can stay here for a little longer."
"Yes, My Fire Lady, Azula," Suki said, a smile on her face. It hadn't been particularly long ago that she would have tried everything in her power to escape from Azula's clutches, but a month and a half of imprisonment and a form of sexual torture had changed that. After several weeks, Suki had almost completely given herself to Azula. She had promised to do anything Azula wanted, anything at all, but she still had a mind of her own, and the princess of the Fire Nation wouldn't have it.
Within the past month and a week, Suki had endured several painful punishments for what Azula had felt to be insubordination. Scratching, beating, and other, more severe forms of torture had been Suki's teachers that bent her to Azula's will. Even if she had done nothing wrong, the 14-year-old would still inflict massive pain upon the warrior from Kyoshi Island to "keep her in line". Now, however, Suki's mind was broken. Azula had done enough. It was evident in the way she cuddled close to her captor in bed, among other things to show she wouldn't disobey.
They lay in Azula's bed for a long while before Konna, now assigned to serve the princess since the day she released Suki from prison, came and announced the beginning of the day. "Will my princess be requiring anything this morning?" the servant girl asked, not looking at Suki. She had found it hard to even look at her friend since she found out what Azula had been doing to her in the dungeons. She wouldn't admit to herself she was disgusted, she didn't like the fact that Azula had broken her friend who, a short time ago, had seemed so strong, so able to resist anything. She couldn't bear to look at Suki now.
"Yes. Bring some food, we'll be eating in here this morning," Azula said, sitting up and bringing Suki up with her. She noticed Konna turning her head to avoid looking at her slave, and a devious smile found it's way across her face. "And be sure to bring some for yourself, I want you to join us."
Konna was stunned, but simply bowed and said, "Yes, my princess." then left to go and retrieve some food to bring to Azula and Suki. She wants me to eat in the same room as them? the servant girl thought to herself along the way I'm not sure I can face Suki just now. What they're doing... What they're doing... She couldn't even bring herself to finish her own thoughts. She shook them away and retrieved some food for Azula, Suki, and herself and brought them to Azula's room as she had been instructed.
"Is something the matter, Konna?" Azula asked the servant girl, noting her stiffness and avoidance of eye contact with her slave with devious enjoyment though keeping it to herself, as she sat down at the table opposite Suki, who was sitting next to the princess.
"N-no, Princess Azula," Konna said, her voice wavering. Yes, she silently admitted to herself, no longer able to deny it. What you two are doing disturbs me to no end. I don't like it.
They ate in silence, Suki and Konna relatively awkward, but Azula ate her food with sadistic glee. Making the girls suffer like this was as delicious as the food, but she decided it was best to not let it continue too long. She didn't want Konna to be of an impaired mind for her daily chores, so she announced she was finished eating, her plate was clean, after all, and that the servant girl was dismissed to go about her daily duties.
It pained Suki to face Konna, and she actually felt as though a weight had been lifted from her shoulders when she left. She had kept what she and the princess were doing a secret for over a month before she found out when she walked in on them one night. Azula had threatened to punish her if she said anything and the only way to avoid retribution would be to submit to her as a personal servant. The princess kept Suki and Konna together a lot of the time, and it was perhaps this very thing that was the most painful psychological torture she inflicted on her love slave. Knowing what she was doing and that her friend knew about it was perhaps the very reason Suki stopped struggling.
Konna, I'm sorry, the Kyoshi Warrior thought to herself as she helped Azula dress I'm really sorry, but there's nothing I can do, nothing I can say to make either of us feel any better about what happened. This is my lot in life now, and doing exactly as I'm told is the only way I can protect you from any pain that Azula may want to inflict upon you.
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Kendra Wolf
Avatar Aang
The Divine Right to Destroy You
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Post by Kendra Wolf on Nov 3, 2007 23:50:58 GMT -5
YAY!! Azula is so evil!!! *does a dance* I can so see how the fic is going to get violent >> << keep up the good work!
*karma*
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Nov 3, 2007 23:57:38 GMT -5
Thank you. Always happy to get positive reviews.
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RadiantBeam
Long Feng
Rosa rubicundior, lilio candidior.
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Post by RadiantBeam on Nov 4, 2007 21:41:06 GMT -5
Azula, you evil, evil child. And Suki always thinking of others. So IC, so awesome. ;D
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historyman12
Fugitive Iroh
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Post by historyman12 on Nov 5, 2007 16:10:38 GMT -5
Azula= every curse possible.
this fic=every compliment possible
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Nov 5, 2007 22:41:03 GMT -5
Azula, you evil, evil child. And Suki always thinking of others. So IC, so awesome. ;D Thank you. Glad you like my work. Azula= every curse possible. this fic=every compliment possible LOL! Thank you so much, but please don't curse Azula. I respect your opinion, but she is one of my favorite characters in Avatar.
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historyman12
Fugitive Iroh
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Post by historyman12 on Nov 6, 2007 20:21:45 GMT -5
Azula, you evil, evil child. And Suki always thinking of others. So IC, so awesome. ;D Thank you. Glad you like my work. Azula= every curse possible. this fic=every compliment possible LOL! Thank you so much, but please don't curse Azula. I respect your opinion, but she is one of my favorite characters in Avatar. I meant that in a good way. good evil-...well rich. I like her, but evil is cool. well, here anyway.
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Nov 7, 2007 20:25:04 GMT -5
Ah. I see. Well, that's what I like about Azula, she's evil and she makes it look so good.
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Post by revanluv on Nov 7, 2007 23:04:03 GMT -5
Only Azula can pull off evilness, in the misdt off all these do gooders and still look friggen amazing. As for the fic... Friggen brilliant, as usual *does the dance of joy*
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Sheogorath
Kyoshi Azula
Lord of the Never-There
Yeah, an Avatard and a brony. Got a problem with that?
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Post by Sheogorath on Nov 8, 2007 0:10:39 GMT -5
Thank you.
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