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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 17, 2007 0:28:03 GMT -5
Hey everyone, this is my first fanfic, so tell me what i should improve on. This takes place 4 days after Azula took control of Ba Sing Se. Enjoy!
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Chapter One
Appa gently began to descend over the dense forest. "No Appa, Yip Yip!" Sokka weakly comanded.
They had been flying for nearly 4 days straight. After Aang had woken up after Katara healed him, he had slipped into a deep sleep. His arrows lit up from time to time and he groaned occasionally.
"Why don't we just land? Whats the harm? I mean, Azula's not following us and we have been flying for like a week!" Whined Toph.
"Because we need to get to the Eastern Air Temple, maybe that Guru guy can help or something." Sokka said.
Just then Aangs arrows lit up and he opened his eyes. They were the sam glowing blue as the arrows. "Huh!" He gasped. He sat up and looked around and then cupped his hands over his face.
Katara sat up, as did the Earth King who had been waking up at every little sound. "Aang? How are you feeling?" Katara asked.
"Where are we going?" Aang asked in an emotionless voice.
Katara gave Aang a questionative look.
"The Eastern Air Temple." Sokka replied glummly.
"I don't know how I feel. I feel pain but at the same time nothing." Aang said in that emotionless voice.
Katara looked into his eyes and saw that they were not his normal curious eyes that she had grown accustomed to. They were emotionless, pools of black with color around them. Nothing less, nothing more.
She shuddered then crawled around to look at Aangs wound. It was the same as when Azula had shot that lightning bolt at him. She layed a finger on it, and almost simotaeniously, Aang whipped around and almost hit Katara.
Aang looked savage for a moment then his eyes lightened as he realized who he had almost knocked off Appa. Her eyes began welling with tears, "Katara...I...I...I didn't know you were the one who touched my wound."
She crawled away from him and sat facing away. As Aang watched her do this, he saw Sokka's face on him with a face that all said one thing.
You've Changed.
The Earth King's face just looked confused. Aang grabbed his Glider and stated that he needed to think. He flew off and into the tree's.
Toph just said, "What just happened?"
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Post by Castoro Chiaro on Jul 17, 2007 1:50:44 GMT -5
Nifty idea! Can't wait to see what you make of it. The part where Aang almost knocked Katara off of Appa after she touched his wound made me laugh. Aang must still be in kill mode
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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 17, 2007 10:29:11 GMT -5
Thanks for the comment, i am working on the second chapter.
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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 18, 2007 11:37:02 GMT -5
Hey guys, this is the second chapter. Just in case if you were wondering, my chapters are relatively short. I am differing whether or not to put Azula in.
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Chapter 2
Katara felt like a wall of emotions had just hit her. Why had Aang done that? Why had he just left? What was going on with him. He usually talked these kinds of things over with her. Not now. After Aang had left, Katara lay and slept. When she awoke, she saw Aang just sitting there.
His eyes were so different.
She shivered and turned towards Aang. "Aang, whats going on with you? Why are you being this way? Tell me whats going on. I want to help."
Sokka shifted in his sleep and groaned. They had set up camp shortly after Aang had left.
"I don't know Katara, all I do know is that it has something to do with the Avatar State. I need to tell you about what happened." Aang said, and with that, he began to explain the tale of the Chakras and The Guru. "He told me that I needed to let all earthly attachments go. That meant you too. I refused but then I gave in, but as I was just ready to do so, I saw you in a vision and you were in trouble. So I stopped and came back for you. Then at the battle with Azula, I knew we would lose if I didn't master the Avatar State." Aang trailed off and for the first time, Katara saw a glint of sadness in his eyes, only a flicker but enough so that she could tell that he had a little bit of himself left.
She leaned over and gave Aang a hug. At first, she gingerly wrapped her arms around him but Aang pulled her closer, hugging her back. A tear rolled down Aangs face.
:...o0o...:
In the morning, Sokka was preparing his pack for flying again. Toph was standing doing nothing. The Earth king had refused to sleep on the ground and was sitting on Appa snoozing. Katara was off with Aang getting water.
The water flowed easly from the river into Katara's water pouch. Aang kneeled next to the river with his hand in the river. He stared blankly at it. The river came from a waterfall up the stream just a bit, falling into a sort of pond that let out at the river.
Katara shifted the water around Aang's hand and it started climb up his arm. He looked at Katara and nodded, standing up and bendeda water whip into his hand as did Katara and they started practicing.
Katara swiftly moved her arms abover her hand and the whip shot at Aang, but he condensed his whip into ice and used it as a shield. Katara brought her hands down and the ice flowed to the ground. She brought up a huge wave and rushed it forth at Aang, but just as it was almost at him, he maneuvered it around him and it rounded back at Katara. She moved her arms outward and one part of the water went to the river and one part went into the forest.
She brought up a lot of water around her then rode a wave over to the pond, and Aang did the same, facing opposite her.
Katara let out the first attack, she waved her arms and a wave came crashing towards Aang, He disapated it into mist, then turned the water droplets into ice and sent them back at Katara. She turned them into water and let them drop. She brought herself up on a pillar of ice and secured her feet to it. She waved her arm 2 inches away from the water towards Aang, and as the water came up, she froze it and curved the top of the frozen line of water inwards.
She sent ice and snowballs up the track and they shot at Aang, who maneuvered them around him and into the waterfall. He brought up an ice pillar, too, but then moved on it towards the waterfall. Katara got the idea and did the same, they got to the waterfall and started to circle around the waterfall on their pillars, forming a helix. Katara shot a waterwhip towards him but he countered and sent Ice Spikes back. She turned the ice into water as it flowed through the waterfall.
Katara noticed they were nearing the top of the waterfall so she brought up mist and shot up on her ice pillar. By the time Aang had gotten up, Katara ad hidden, when he stepped right where she wanted him too, she shot a big water ball at him. He fell over.
"I win!" She announced.
"Good Job." Aang said with a little emotion. Katara could tell that he was still in there somewhere, she just need to make it surface.
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Post by yasudaratsu on Jul 18, 2007 20:27:37 GMT -5
Pretty interesting, wondes how this will turn, keep up the good work.*karmas* Poor Aang seems to be still shocked by Azula's attack
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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 20, 2007 0:13:29 GMT -5
In this chapter, the gaangs trip alters and a hint, or foreshadow, is dropped. See if you can catch it. This series of fanfic is going to be very shorit, i plan on doing two more chapters then the ending. in the ending there will be an event that will set the wheels in motion for a new fan fic i will start like two weeks after posting the last chapter in this fanfic. Thanks for reading!
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Chapter 3
As night fell, Aang saw the stars coming out and remembered his cosmic self. He turned his head and looked away.
"How long till we get to the Eastern Air Temple?" Toph asked.
"I have no idea, Aang, how long?" Sokka redirected the question.
"We aren't going to the Eastern Air Temple, we are going to General Fong's base to ready ourselves for The Day of Black Sun." Aang answered, once again without emotion.
"But what about you?" Katara asked with sudden concern. "We don't know if that lightning bolt did something to you or not."
"I am fine. Something inside is telling me to go to the base. Plus, if Azula knows about the Eclipse, won't she start taking out all the army bases?" Aang said. There was a glint of defensivness in his voice that Katara caught. She gave a small smile.
"Fine. We'll go, Aang has something going here. He's right, Azula would do that." Katara said.
"Plus," Sokka nodded towards the Earth King, "he'll be safe there." Sokka said, suddenly warming up to the idea.
"Yip yip." Aang called to Appa, and they shot forward toward the base.
:..o0o..:
Aang thought it best to leave Appa a ways back from the Base for he said that Azula might have already taken it down.
They stealthily made their ways through the trees closing in on the base. Aang decided to fly above and see for himself if it was safe.
Everything appeared to be ok. He landed and told the gang to follow him. They walked up to the gate and two gaurds came out. They were Earth Kingdom so Aang said, "Take us to General Fong."
The Gaurds told them to follow and so they did. Katara shuddered as they walked through the courtyard where The General hand once envoked the Avatar State out of Aang. To do that he put her life in danger. She was not looking forward to seeing him again.
They walked into a hallway and through a corridor and into a vast room. At the far end sat the General. "Welcome back, Avatar Aang. I see you brought your friends, and...who are those two people?" The General asked out of the blue.
"This," Aang notioned towards Toph. "Is Toph Bei Fong."
Toph just stared blankly ahead.
"And this," He notioned to the Earth King. "Is The Earth King."
As soon as the word King left Aangs mouth, everyones, except the gangs, mouth dropped open. Then, almost simotaeniously, everybody began to bow. Even General Fong did. The Earth King smiled. Bosco groaned.
After everyone was done exchanging hellos, The Earth King was escorted to a room. "I am sorry, but we have some more guests, so would you be alright with staying in a makeshift room? There will be beds, just not a real room." General Fong asked.
They accepted gratefully.
Aang decided to tell him about Ba Sing Se tomorrow
When they were leaving, The General put a hand on Tophs shoulder. "Did he say you name was Toph Bei Fong?"
Toph hesitated for a moment. She decided it would do them no harm to tell her her name, "Yes."
"Hmmm." General Fong dismissed her and he went back to his seat to ponder.
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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 20, 2007 0:53:31 GMT -5
Chapter 4
When Toph awoke, she was in a different room. She was on a bed she could tell. She reached around for something made of stone. Her hand made contact with a wall. She felt someone moving outside of the room. She jumped up and stamped her foot and heard a scream. She thought she recognized the voice. "It couldn't be..."
She opened the door and heard the voice again, "Toph, release me!"
“Mom?” Toph asked blindly. She knew it was her. She turned around and ran.
The room she was looking for was on the 1st floor. She felt that she was on the 2nd. She could get there in a jiffy. She ran down a corridor and through a hallway until she felt the stairs to her left. But a voice behind her called, “Toph, stop immediatly! It’s me, your Father. Your safe now.”
“I was never in any danger!” She shouted and found who the voice belonged to. She moved her arms in a swivel and stomped her foot. She heard him scream.
“Toph, wait, don’t do this.” He called out.
She turned the stairs flat and slid down. She ran around a corner and burst through the door to the place where she had gone to sleep.
“Where have you been Toph?!?” Asked an Infuriated Aang. “You don’t just leave and not tell us where your going. Where were you.”
Panting, Toph explained that her parents were here. “We have to go, they will have the gaurds take me with them. They think I’m in danger. Lets go!”
Aang motioned for them to go, so they grabbed there stuff and ran through the base. Just as they were about to enter the courtyard, Toph said stop, “There’s people in there. My parents too!’
“It’s the only way out!” Katara exclaimed.
“Then lets all stand in a circle facing outwards. So they can’t get us. Then we run for Appa.” Sokka said. They all got into a circle.
Toph was the first one out. She sent a wave of earth crashing outwards from there path. “RUN!” She exclaimed.
They all ran as fast as they could. Suddenly there were boulders flying in from everywhere overhead. Aang flowed his arms in different directions and a big swirling vortext appeared between his arms, like a funnel it opened up wider at the top. As the rocks flew in, they went through the tube, which Aang shot at visible gaurds. They blocked, but stopped sending rocks.
A man and woman walked in front of the gates. Gaurds trailed off on either side of them. Aang signaled for them to all face them.
“What do you want?” Aang shouted at them.
“Toph” Said the man.
“Why do you want me to come home?!? I joined them to fight the firenation!” Toph screamed
“You are too young and not strong eno-” The man got cut off for toph sent a wave of earth hurtling towards one side of the gaurds. Before they could react, they were knocked into the air and over the wall.
“You alway think I CAN’T DO ANYTHING!” Toph screamed sending a blast of earth towards more gaurds. She was beginning to let her emotions get the better of her.
“If I’m SO helpless than how can I BEND METAL?” She sent a wave flowing towards other gaurds.
Aang was contemplating something. Sokka was just standing there watching Toph take out all these gaurds. Katara biting her thumbnail, worried at how this was going to end.
Toph was seething. She had so much pent up in her, it was all seeping out. She hated her parents. They had always told her she was helpless. That she needed help with everything. She was stronger than both of them.
“Toph, we just want you to come home because we love you! We want to help you! You need our Help!” The woman shouted.
“MAYBE I DON’T NEED YOUR HELP! THE ONLY GOOD THING YOU COULD DO IS LEAVE ME WITH MY FRIENDS!” With that she thrust her arm back ready to throw the most powerful wave she could do at her parents. Right when she went to do it, someone grabbed her arm. “HEY!” She turned to look at who had grabbed her arm.
It was Aang, only he was in The Avatar State. “No. I have an Idea. Watch.” He said in that strange voice.
He thrust his arms out knuckles facing up, then turned them facing down and pulled them back in. Around the gang, the ground cracked, forming a circle around them. He thrust his fists downward and the makeshift platform shot up about five feet.
Just as it was about to come down, he bended air to launch them into the air on the platform. He kept bending the air around them so that they would glide over the wall. Tophs eyes met with her mothers, then they were over the wall. Aang told them Katara and Toph to grab his hands, and Sokka to grab Kataras. He breathed in and blew air at the platform. They launched into the air just as the platform crashed into the ground. The gang landed gently. As soon as their feet touched the ground, they were off running towards where they left Appa.
:....o0o...:
As they flew off into the night, Toph stared blankly into space. As she did so, a tear rolled down her face.
“Look, is that...smoke?” Katara asked.
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Post by yasudaratsu on Jul 20, 2007 9:28:23 GMT -5
That was intense, poor Toph, will loook towards next chapter, keep going like that.*karmas*
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Post by ryanj27 on Jul 24, 2007 1:57:26 GMT -5
Note: this is the second to last chapter, next is last. I hope you like this one, it has a little more detail. But I hope i did the right thing with one of the characters( X X) youll see...;-)
To everyones dismay, Katara was right. In the distance there was a smoke pillar that was tendrilling upwards into the sky. The black clouds of ash and smoke floated around them.
"Not Again!" Sokka whined.
Just then, they saw a big explosion coming up from the little camp ahead. A metal door flew past Appa. They saw Lightning, fire, and blue fire shooting out of the smoke covered camp. Then they saw someone running out of the camp with three people running after the person.
"I'm going down to take a look." Aang stated.
As he was just about to go, Katara grabbed his arm, "Be Careful."
For the first time Aang gave a small smile and nodded. He flew off into the trees. Appa just circled ahead.
Suddenly Appas eyes widened and he began to dive. "No Appa, Yip Yip!" Sokka yelled.
But Appa just kept diving untill he leveled and maneauvered around the trees till he came to a clearing.
Aang was standing there with Iroh. They began running towards them when a blue line of fire smacked down in front of them. Azula stood at the edge of the clearing. She smiled and shot a lightning bolt at Aang. He spun his glider and it disipated. Ty Lee jumped at Iroh but Aang slammed his foot down and a boulder flew up out of the ground and knocked Ty Lee into the Trees. Mai shot knives at him, but Aang brought up an earth wall.
Aang yelled at Iroh to get to Appa and after he was on, Aang yelled, "Yip Yip!" and Appa was off, generating some suprise from Iroh.
Aang turned just in time to see Azula shoot a lightnight bolt at thim. He brought up some earth and moved it forward.
:..o0o..:
Everyone on Appa just stared at Iroh. He was wearing his Earth Kingdom outfit and looked rather weak. The lines under his eyes were even more saggy than the last time they had seen him and his beared was fraying. It was easy to comprehend though for he had spent nearly a week under Azulas "care". He had rips and burns in his clothing in places.
"What are you doing here?" Sokka asked pointing a finger at Iroh.
"Your friend helped me escape, Azula was taking me back to the Fire Nation." Iroh explained.
Sokka turned around, it seemed he was confused that there was the enemy with them.
I know that youi think that I am the enemy, but I would rather be with Azula than go to Firelord Ozai." Iroh explained.
Suddenly they heared a loud boom. Katara was facing the way it came from so she was the first too see it.
A great wave of earth was flowing outwards. Treese were ripped up and flew everywhere.
"Appa, Yip Yip!" Katara yelled.
:..o0o..:
Aang brought the lightning around him and shot it back at Azula.
Azula was surprised at this and was shocked when it almost hit her. She knew that when The Avatar was in the Avatar State, he could do great things, but he was just a child, how could he know such techniques?
Mai shot more knives at him.
Aang had had enough, he brought up three giant boulders and moved them forward with the most power he could muster. Ty Lee jumped off of the one heading towards her, Azula blew hers up with Lightning. But Mai could not do these things, and the boulder hit her. She flew back into the trees. They heard snapping branches then a slump. Azula momentarily looked where Mai had flown back but then returned to the fight. But Ty Lee's eyes filled with tears, she ran as fast as she could over to where Mai had flown.
Azula shot two more lightning bolts at the Avatar but the first one he channeled throough him and it flew off into space, but the second one he flowed through himself and shot it back at Azula.
Azula had still been shocked by the turnout of the first one so she wasn't ready for the second one. When she saw it, she was too late. She disipated most of it but the rest hit her. She fell over. By the time she got up, the Avatar was gone.
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