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Post by Mashnii on Oct 16, 2006 12:18:59 GMT -5
Wow...this is actually really good! Why hasn't anyone reviewed? Is it on ff.net?
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 16, 2006 12:29:10 GMT -5
Back at the pile of rubble, a metal fist and arm punch out of the stone, shingles, and other wreakage. Then two more fists and arms punch out. To the left, three more punch out. Then finally, The metal encased spirit monster, Ganosis breaks out on stands up on top of the pile. His metal suit, metal head or mask/helmet, and his six metal arms and metal legs are finally damaged, but not enough to stop him.
Ganosis roars in fury, and rage. "Curse you Avatar AAAAANNNNNGGG!!!!".
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 16, 2006 12:30:14 GMT -5
Wow...this is actually really good! Why hasn't anyone reviewed? Is it on ff.net? Thanks Mash!! And no It is just here.
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 16, 2006 12:45:08 GMT -5
"Aang, we are outside the inner wall, I think we lost him.", Katara says. Aang had been running with Katara in his arms and had only thought of two things in that time, 'I have to get Katara away from that thing if I even die of exhaustion trying!! And I like having Katara in my arms like this.'.
Aang stopped, set Katara down, then fell backwards.
Aang slowly sat up, then Katara wraps her arms around him in a hug.
"Thank you soo much Aang.", she says. "You saved my life."
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 16, 2006 14:26:26 GMT -5
Toph had recently woken up after being knocked out. She told the police and they sent few squads of non-bending policemen to the industrial district. Toph was kept back at the station for her safety.
A squad of eight policemen enter the old ciggarette factory. Suddenly, hanging from the ceiling, Ganosis lepts down with his six metal arms and his six swords drawn. He starts slashing his swords around, four are twirlling like propellers.
The Policemen fight back, but underestimate Ganosis. The spirit monster suddenly, with a hard thrust, jabs a sword right through a policeman's chest armor. The blade penetrates the armor completely, and goes into the policemans chest. A fatal strike, killing the man.
Ganosis pulls his sword out, letting the dead enemy fall to the floor. Then Ganosis sheaths his swords and folds his metal arms away.
Ganosis then jumps to the side and his metal foot claws sink into the stone wall of the building, allowing him to stand on the wall. He then thrusts himself off the wall and slams into the floor, the collison force results in sending the other policemen off their feet.
One policeman charges at Ganosis as the metal encased spirit unfolds his six arms and draws his six swords. One hefty slash of one of the spirit's swords slices the policeman's throat open. The fatal blow causes the man to fall down dead.
Ganosis picks up the policeman's sword with his left metalic foot, balancing on his right foot. Ganosis spins around and releases the sword, sending it flying into a policeman's face.
Slashing his swords arond, Ganosis Kills three more policemen, leaving only two left.
One of them tries to attack Ganosis but the spirit monster extends his right leg and wraps his metal foot claws around the man's head. He then slams the policeman's head into the floor, sinking it underground. Ganosis does the same thing to the other policeman.
Then, Ganosis performs a backflip, releasing the two men while in the air. As Ganosis lands on his metal feet, the two policmen slam hard, and fataly, against the stone wall.
"If the police of the biggest city in the world are going to try to stop an imortal, heavily armored, and powerful spirit, they should atleast put some effort into it.", Ganosis says to himself.
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 22, 2006 19:05:26 GMT -5
Ganosis is continuing his search for the Avatar, and has found help with a ciggarette dealer. The dirty man has gotten info. on a Noblman named Sha Ninko, a good friend of the Earth King. This politician knows where the gaang resides in the city.
"So now what? Knock on his door and ask him to give up the Avatar?", the ciggarette dealer asks.
"Once he hears of my vicious attacks, he will be weary of uninvited guests.", Ganosis responds. "I'll use a more subtle approach.".
"Well... I shoudn't mention this, but if you want an invite, I did come across a bounty Sha Ninko himself posted. Longoni Two-Swords, reward is 15,000 gold pieces, dead or alive, same reward either way. You bag this one, and your guaranteed to win an audiace with this politic bozo."
"I'll find this Longoni!!".
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 22, 2006 22:42:58 GMT -5
Ganosis has tracked Longoni Two-Swords to the gambling cantina. He approches Longoni at a bar table.
"You, filth, are coming with me!", Ganosis says to Longoni.
"You bounty hunters just keep on coming!", Longoni replys."When will Sha Ninko learn? There ain't no one can bring me down, dead or alive."
"That's for me to decide."
"If you try to...OOOW!!"
Ganosis has just slamed the handle of one of his swords down onto Longoni's head, knocking the man out.
"Good Night ugly!", Ganosis says as he drags Longoni out of the cantina.
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Im such a nice person....HAHAH yea right
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Post by Keira on Oct 28, 2006 10:44:45 GMT -5
I like the story
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 29, 2006 10:41:09 GMT -5
"The reward is not satisfactory?", Sha Ninko asks Ganosis after the metal encased spirit delivers Longoni.
"Satisfactory, but not sufficient.", Ganosis answers.
"You must want something else."
"Information."
"On what?"
"The Avatar."
"I will not tell you!"
"I'll give you 12,000 gold pieces back."
"DEAL!!!".
Sha Ninko writes down the gaang's address and hugs his sacks of money he just got back.
"Thanks!", Ganosis says as he walks out into the night. "What a baby.", He mutters under his breath.
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Oct 29, 2006 11:05:45 GMT -5
Ganosis arrives at the upper city around 10:00 in the morning. He finds the gaang's home with no trouble. Almost everyone is up and about. Toph left early to train at an arena, and beat-up a few guys as well. Aang is in the basement doing Sokka's chores for him.
Ganosis knocks on the door.
"Sokka, since Aang is doing your work for you, you can start doing your share and answer the door.", Katara tells Sokka.
"Who is it?", Sokka asks.
"Telegram!", Ganosis answers.
"Yeah Right."
"Meat Delivery!!"
"YEAH!! WOOO!!"
Sokka opens the door and Ganosis grips Sokka's throat, wrapping his metal fingers around the warrior's neck. Ganosis then hurls Sokka out onto the street.
"Your Welcome!!!", Ganosis shouts. "I expect a tip!!"
Ganosis slams the door shut, and charges into the family room. Katara gasps as Ganosis extends his right, metal arm, and grabs her right arm and pulls Katara out of her chair with a hard and sudden tug. He then releases her and Katara slams against the wall.
Katara slides to the floor and lightly cries in pain. Ganosis picks up her animal skin water pouch.
"You won't be needing this anymore.", Ganosis says as he hurls it out a window.
"AANGGG!!!", Katara shouts as Ganosis steps closer.
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by boomerangblue on Nov 1, 2006 12:41:34 GMT -5
It sounds Okay, but there are few grammar mistakes throughout the story, also, Have you ever seen Star Wars episode three? This Ganosis guy sounds alot like general Greivious(sp) Did you base this character on him? I mean, the fact that he has multiple arms and is completly encased in metal and hase 6 swords basicly. it's a very interesting story! Is everyone gonna DIE??? I sound so emo...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Nov 3, 2006 21:16:59 GMT -5
Aang rushes upstairs to find Ganosis Standing over a trembling Katara, ready to destroy her.
Aang creates a pulling gust of wind, but Ganosis heard Aang's foot steps and thrusts himself into the air, slaming through the roof and landing in the backyard.
"Avatar Aang!!", Ganosis shouts, "You can't escape!! You can run, but not forever. No matter where you run, you will have to stop and rest sometime.".
Aang knew Ganosis was right, so he listened.
"When you do stop to rest Avatar Aang, I will be not too far behind. I have far more power, strength, and endurance than you can ever dream to have. You can live your life on the run, or you can face me and fight for your own life!!".
Katara gets up and rushes to Aang, pulling him into a deep hug. Tears forming in her eyes. Aang hugs her back.
"Don't listen to him Aang, you don't have to fight him.", Katara says crying. Aang couldn't stand seeing her like this, but he knew what he had to do.
"I have to Katara, he is right.", Aang replied.
"Aang, the world can't lose you! I can't!"
"He is right Katara..."
"Aang... I-I..."
"FIGHT ME AVATAR!!!", Ganosis shouts at Aang. "Or that girl there will be my next victim!!".
Aang runs out the back door to face him.
Ganosis splits his metal arms into 6 and draws his 6 duelswords.
"Time to meet your death Avatar!! You shall die today!!"
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Nov 4, 2006 13:01:39 GMT -5
Aang uses earthbending on Ganosis, seeing how he knows how to evade most of the other bending forms. Aang can't seem to even hit the metal encased spirit. Ganosis doesn't even seem to be trying his hardest.
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Nov 5, 2006 20:54:35 GMT -5
Ganosis extends his right metal leg, and grips Aang's stomach. Then he whirls around, releasing Aang in the process. Aang hits the ground hard, sliding across a field of dirt. Ganosis walks toward Aang, convinced his victory is near.
Aang gets up, and earthbends up a dozen small boulders. Then Aang sends the boulders hurdling at Ganosis. Instead
Instead of getting hit, or even jumping out of the way, Ganosis continues walking foreward. The metal encased spirit slashes his swords around, slicing up each boulder.
Aang creates his rock-covered fist and as Ganosis is just about to reach Aang, he slams his fist foreward, striking Ganosis.
Ganosis is sent hurling back, onto the ground. Aang sees an opportunity to strike Ganosis again, and charges toward Ganosis. Ganosis stands up, sheaths one of his swords, and stikes Aang in the stomach with his hard metal fist. As Aang clutches his stomach in pain, Ganosis hits him again, this time hitting his lips and chin. Aang covers his mouth with one hand, then he looks at his hand. Aang notices blood from his mouth on his hand.
Ganosis punches Aang's shoulder, hard. Aang's eyes fill with tears, and he tries not to cry of pain. Ganosis grips Aang by his shirt, then slams Aang onto the ground. Then again, and again. Ganosis then looks at Aang, falling unconcious, and slighly laughs evily.
"Foolish boy...", Ganosis says."... You ran right to your death!". Ganosis draws his other sword, and prepares to deliver the final and fatal blow. As he prepares he continues to speak.
"I wonder who will miss you the most, Avatar wretch?!! That girl perhaps, yes, I did see her crying for you before this fight."
Ganosis gets a thought of how heartbroken Katara would be if he killed Aang. The spirit shunned this thought quickly, knowing he would do almost whatever he could to hurt and harm anyone.
"Since she is already crying...", Ganosis says in his dark, evil tone. "... I should give her something to cry for.".
"I believe we deserve a say in this.".
Ganosis turns to see Toph, Sokka, and a whole bunch of big earthbenders.
Ganosis walks toward them and laughs evily. "You pathetic embarrassments don't know when to quit!!".
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Kataang's Supreme on Nov 7, 2006 17:05:38 GMT -5
Sokka throws his boomerang at Ganosis. The metal encased spirit simply catches the boomerang, bends it out of shape, and drops it on the ground.
"BOOMERANG!! NOOOOO!!!", Sokka screams in terror. "Leave this to the perfessionals.", Toph says. "Let's get him!".
Toph and the big earthbenders create a small earthquake that knocks Ganosis off his feet. Then, one of the earthbenders sends a boulder hurdling toward Ganosis. The spirit monster stands up, catches the boulder, then throws it back. The man gets hit hard and is knocked out.
One earthbender runs up to Ganosis, but is knocked out when Ganosis slams the handle of one of his swords onto the man's head. After falling down unconcious, Ganosis sticks his sword hard into the man's body. Ganosis pulls his sword out, and Toph is alone, besides Sokka who is still shocked from his boomerang's condition.
Ganosis turns around, expecting to see the unconcious Avatar, but instead sees Katara sending shards of ice toward him. Then he sees Toph hurling boulders at him.
Ganosis begins twrilling his swords around like propellers.
TO BE CONTINUED...
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