Akane (War of Four RPG)

[Dazu]

This is my first role-playing so yeah, be prepared. Well here it is *cringes from nervousness*:

Name: Akane (brilliant red)

Age: 14

Gender: Female

Bender: Yes, Fire. Not very fast at learning and takes time for her
to fully understand a move.

Siblings?: 2 brothers both older. Oldest: Chan, second oldest: Huang.

Appearance: Dark brown, straight hair, dark gold eyes, pale skin. Wears a red yukata that is edged with gold, although that's only when her parents force her to wear it. Usually she wears her red training pants (no shoes), and a white sleeveless shirt edged in scarlet red thread and a flame in the middle.(I'm not good at describing clothes.) Her hair is most likely down, though occasionally she decides to pull it up into a high ponytail. The ponytail is held up by a scarlet red ribbon with gold thread outlining a dragon.

Personality: Is a very mischievous young teenager who can be easily angered. Dislikes the war for she sees it as pointless and stupid. She believes the firenation should keep to themselves. Began to dislike the war mostly because her oldest brother was drafted into the war and (secretly) is very worried about him. She enjoys tormenting people just by annoying them with pranks and not shutting up. Akane is also a "little" bit sarcastic.

History: Before the war started and was being planned, her parents lived on a small island near the firenation's coast. Akane would usually sit around outside trying to improve on her firebending, drawing in the dirt, or annoying her older brother, Huang, as payback. When the firenation had conquered their first village her parents moved her to the Earth Kingdom village that had been taken over by the firenation. Once there she tries to mess with nearby soldiers anyway she can (and to see if this was her brother's fleet). After a big fight with her parents and her older brother about the war and her firebending skills, she ran-away and hid in nearby woods only to be found by another group of firenation soldiers in the area. She lies and says she is lost and travels with them from village to village until she "finds" her way back home (or until she finds her brother). From village to village she truly sees what war is doing and is determined to stop it as soon as she can.

EXAMPLE OF RPING SKILLS(very low): Akane walked into her small house, her face beaded with sweat. She had been practicing her bending, or rather trying to practice her bending, unfortunately for her, she is not too skilled with her bending and must concentrate on not burning everything in sight. Akane changed and returned back outside, "I still can't believe we have to move." Akane whispered angrily. "The war the firelord is planning is pointless!" She sat down on the hard floor and began to meditate. No more than five minutes from when she started she was interrupted by her older brother, Huang, "Ohhh Akaneee!" Akane growled, "What?" she asked bitterly. "Akaneee!" "WHAT!?" "AKANEEE!" "WHAT!??!" Akane turned and glared at Huang, he smirked back at her, "Nothing!". Akane sent him a death glare and returned to her meditation, only to be interrupted once again by none other than Huang, "I'll get you back for this!" she muttered to him. And that she did. When Akane had finished meditating she had snuck into Huang's belongings and poured papaya juice all over them.

I am soooooooo bad at this! (just to let you know)

I edited this but I'm sure its not any better . Anywho thanks zuko'sfire for pointing things out to me.

[Zukosfire5]

First of all, I would like to say that I'm glad that you are trying out RPing. I think you'll find it's a very fun thing to do.

Okay, on to the profile.

1. It would help if you were more descriptive in the personality, appearance, and history. Especially the history.

I'm not sure if you realize this, but kimonos are extremely complicated things to wear. I would suggest instead a yukata. A yukata is very similar to a kimono just not as ornate and complicated to put on.

2. Personality is great, but you could expand a bit more on it. For instance, why does she think the war is pointless and stupid?

3. The history needs to be much longer. And also, no pet flaming tiger. Those don't exist in the Avaverse.

Also, you said she had a fight with her parents and older brother. However, you didn't say what the fight was about. Please expand more on that topic.

Otherwise than that, this looks like it's off to a great start.

[Dazu]

Thanks for the advice, I'll edit as soon as I can. (big greek history test tom.)