A War's Beginning

[historyman12]

BC: I followed your genral request on names, and many of may major characters have Chinese names. I hope you'rr happy.


The war rom was dark, the only light being from Sozin's ring of fire around his throne.

"Xiang Xun." bellowed Sozin, and Xun stepped up.

"Y-yes, my lord," said Xun

"How are the preparations coming?" asked Sozin

"They go well, my lord, the attack on the temples is set to be swift, and decisive"

"True to your style."

"Of course your highness."

"You may sit now, thank you. Chang Fu Li! Your turn to report, is the king fooled?"

"Yes, on the attack led by Zhen Yi is still set as a diplomatic journey by Bao Cheng, giving us an excuse to bring large forces; using them as bodyguards."

"Or so they think," Bao Cheng chimed in

"Yes, we know that Bao" Chang replied with exasperation

"sorry" Bao said curtly

"Back to the plan" said Sozin

"well, lord that's really it."

"Good, now Ru Wen, have you suggestions for anyone? You seem to know how past invasions have gone." said Sozin

"Why, yes, we beat Chin back due to our nationalism, and zeal to defend our homeland. Chin got as far as the beach on our second sourthern-most island due to surprise. We are nearly guarranteed Kai-Amibola but we must continue to keep them guessing, perhaps invasions on other areas and courses that seem different from what it looks like we would do. But that-of course" he said gesturing to the two genrals in presence. "Is up to our noble commanders. Two more things your grace, do you mind if I continue?"

"Yes, yes" Sozin replied distantly

"Thank you lord. Now, we must wzage a sea war, our navy could destroy theirs even if our navy was half its current size. We ought to blockade their ports and wreck their navy, they will be forced to divert men from their land forces to try and rebuild their own and attack our ships. Last, since they have national zeal, we ought to keep up ours, perhaps through propaganda, or other means. That isall your highness."

"Good ideas Ru, as usual. You are all dismissed!" he said cheerfully.



Well, that was the first scene. I know its awful

[Zink]

Hm. Interesting take on Sozin- he's not exactly the "take over the world" type, which is kinda refreshing. I like seeing the start of FN propoganda. The humor ("yes, we know that") was a nice touch, too.

The names are nice and Chinese, which adds an admirable authenticity, although it rather challenges my Western-named mind, where pronouncing 'anime' was orginally a struggle. I'd also reccomend reviewing your punctuation. While it didn't make the piece unreadable, it is noticable and off-putting.

You have me wondering where this fic is going, which (mostly) is a good thing. Update soon!

[yasudaratsu]

Very interesting, the names and the humor are a nice touch indeed, and how he talks so absently is an added effect to make it funnier, keep up the good work.

[sugarland31]

SOZIN! With whom I have recently become obssessed with! (And you know he wasn't some psycho evil Fire Lord...I wonder if we'll ever get to really see him during the series?!?)

[Kana]

OMG I thought at first Xiang-Xun was my OC, Xiang-Yun. LOL XD

Good job so far!

[historyman12]

Here we have a bona-fide Chapter 2!


Sozin simply sat back in his chair after the others in the meeting had left, wondering how closely his vision for the grand attack on the Earth Kingdom would match what actually happened. He decided that no matter what he would destroy those men in the Earth Kingdom for what Qin did to the Fire Nation years ago. He remembered suddenly that he had no speech to cover up Bao's journey, which, if it was to be as important as Sozin, or, more accurately, his diplomats had told the King, he needed a speech. He simply sat there and decided that he would tell one of his speechwriters to write a speech.

On the day before the “diplomatic journey” was sent off Sozin addressed the group of citizens gathered at the town square in the capital.

“Citizens of the Fire Nation, today I bring you great news. One of our high-ranking nobles, Bao Cheng heads to Earth Kingdom on a journey tomorrow. It will most assuredly bring much good to the Fire Nation, as well as bring about great changes in our great relationship with the Earth Kingdom!” The crowd, of course, thought these all were unrelated to war and went on with wild cheers.

“Indeed, it will be among the best things for this country ever! I know you will support these great things for many reasons. Now, I send the glorius Bao Cheng off to the Earth Kingdom so that he may commence on his mission!”

Sorry it’s so danged short.

[Zink]

LOL, I love his not-quite outright lying.

Longer next time!