Silent Snow (OC, Water Tribe) Chapter 2 up!

[Isaac]

This is a fanfic I was inspired to write by an OC one-shot I wrote for a friend.

I would like some constructive criticism on how I did, namely characterization and action. If this is decent enough I will probably continue it, but I do not know if I have enough experience yet for a series.

Thanks to all readers ;D!

NOTE: To make this thread easier to read, I have transferred the story over to fanfiction.net. There is one change to the plot that is important. Zhi, whose age was originally put around fifty, is now very old and considered over one hundred years old. This will be important later on.

www.fanfiction.net/s/3456250/1/

[taiyo *on limited hiatus*]

Oh.....my.....God....THAT WAS GREAT!!!! The ending was so sad though. *sniffles* Poor Jun! I hope Rinash is still alive. I love your characterization, Isaac, especially the relationship between Rinash and Jun. That's like one of the cutest sibling relationships I have ever seen. The action was great too! I had a hard time leaving to return a PM to a friend. You had it a a great pace and it kept my interest.

I have to give you karma for this. It's too awesome for me to just read and review. *karmas*

[Isaac]

Thanks taiyo, I wish more people would read my fanfic haha

For those who have read it, I know my writing may fall somewhere between "horrible" and 'really good" making it difficult to comment on. However, any minor critique is appreciated.

As for my story, I have already begun "Chapter 2: Flowing Water (ft. the Kyoshi Warriors!)" and hopefully when I post it in a day or so more people will read haha

[Kana]

ZOMG!!! *is foaming* *karmas*
I love it! You did a great job, and I cant waitr to read chapter 2!

[Isaac]

Chapter 2 is up!

This is a short chapter, as I decided to divide this chapter from the one that will be on Kyoshi Island.

For comments, I'd like people to focus on my dialogue and characterization for where I can improve.

I hope you enjoy it!

EDIT: Yes the name is derived from a famous Salvador Dali painting (the melty clocks one) I've always loved that title

www.fanfiction.net/s/3456250/2/

[Kana]

Great job on chatpter two!

[Isaac]

Well at least I have one fan haha thanks Kanasha

I guess my fanfic falls in the realm of "not great but not horrible" so I understand if anyone has trouble making a comment, but please be assured that any input is appreciated input.

Chapter 3 is nearly complete (even if no one reads I have a desire to write this haha) expect if by the end of the week if not sooner.

[Kana]

;D Yeah chap. 3!

By the way, I was wondoring when I figure how to do it, I could put the Silent Snow on my iPod? I figured I should ask first.

[Isaac]

kanasha said:

;D Yeah chap. 3!

By the way, I was wondoring when I figure how to do it, I could put the Silent Snow on my iPod? I figured I should ask first.

You can do that ?

Haha yeah sure, its not like I have a monetary stake in it, and if it helps you read it all the better!

Now I would just like to inform you, as well as anyone interested, that I have been building up my fic for a huge event in Chapter 4.

The rest has been mostly intro, but once I get to Chapter 4 the story will really take form so please keep reading till then !

[Kana]

Yeah! I really love this fanfic ( and not just beacause my OC is in it) *waits for chapter three*


Are you gonna make chapter three?