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Post by goten0040 on Nov 2, 2011 21:43:59 GMT -5
www.twitvid.com/TVT1QThis is a rough cut of a song I've been writing this evening, "Something." I'd just really like a little feedback. I think it needs some more work, but I'd like to hear what you guys think. Lyrics: Rain pounds hard on the window As I pack my bag You should've known I'd be a no-show And I really hate to brag You used to really be something Now you're nothing at all I can't stay and let you hurt me I can't stay and watch you fall You will never be my bruise I've got nothing left to lose I gave up everything to you Thinking maybe someday I'd be something too Every little thing that mattered I am leaving in the past I can't let myself be shattered I can't make this love last Now I've finally changed my view Won't let you hurt me; I refuse I have finally learned the truth I've always been something Today I'll be something without you
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 2, 2011 22:52:59 GMT -5
Sounds like a rough break up!
Love the song. (but you need either a better piano or better recording equipment. And that is really the only thing I can find remotely wrong)
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Post by goten0040 on Nov 2, 2011 22:56:38 GMT -5
I do. I'm staring at these amazing mics on GuitarCenter.com and wanting to cry cuz I can't pay a hundred bucks to buy them.
And oddly enough, I've never had a rough break up. That's just the words that came to me.
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 2, 2011 23:00:38 GMT -5
^_^ Lucky you. because it sounds like you lived it. (Or did you fire your boss?) yeah, I hear you, the equipment is high!. But hey, ebay and craigslist, you never know what you can find! (Or hook up with Jimmy Wong )
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Post by goten0040 on Nov 2, 2011 23:02:27 GMT -5
I guess I kind of lived it, but not with a boyfriend? I've been through a lot of rough "break-ups" with friends and even with a very large amount of my family.
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 2, 2011 23:07:28 GMT -5
It's the same thing. Lost Love.
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Post by goten0040 on Nov 2, 2011 23:19:06 GMT -5
That's true. The more I listen to it, the prouder I am of it. That's a good sign.
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 2, 2011 23:59:06 GMT -5
^_^ You have all reason to be proud! Had to listen to your other original again, too! 'Try' is just wonderful (though I am waiting for the 2nd voice to go with it! )
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Post by goten0040 on Nov 7, 2011 22:38:31 GMT -5
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 8, 2011 16:10:30 GMT -5
YOU ADDED STRINGS!!!!!
You really need better recording equipment!
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Post by goten0040 on Nov 8, 2011 22:05:32 GMT -5
I KNOWWWWW but I don't feel like I'll ever be able to afford the high end equipment.
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Post by Gran Gran on Nov 8, 2011 23:10:30 GMT -5
you can do it - eventually!
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Post by Gran Gran on Mar 10, 2012 21:58:37 GMT -5
Hey, you got it as MP3? So I can add it to my other song of yours? <GRIN>
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Post by goten0040 on Mar 11, 2012 16:36:08 GMT -5
Yeah! Message me your email and I'll send you one.
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Post by Gran Gran on Mar 18, 2012 20:00:33 GMT -5
Thank you! ^_^
I am in love with it!
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