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Post by samfan911 on Aug 28, 2006 20:54:50 GMT -5
Jade thinks for a moment then wrote.Hmmm well, maybe heat will reveal something, I won't burn it, just make the paper a little warm
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Post by syarafire on Aug 28, 2006 21:08:25 GMT -5
Mali nodded in approval towards Jade. It sounded reasonable, and as long as the paper didn't burn, it was fine with her.
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Post by Horyo on Aug 28, 2006 22:54:17 GMT -5
THe proctor stood up again, and announcd.
"If you do not figure this out, you will all fail, now, you can quit the exams while you're ahead, and maybe have another shot next time. But you have 24 hours to figure this out before I fail any of you, oh, and if your partner fails, you fail to." He then seated himself.
Horyo cursed, that seemed impossible, he wanted to quit, but that could cost Soba, so he kept quiet.
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Post by samfan911 on Aug 28, 2006 23:18:46 GMT -5
Jade touch the paper and heats the paper a little without burning it, she wonders if it work. She then wrote down Should we bring this to the proctor
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Post by writer on Aug 29, 2006 6:53:09 GMT -5
Soba crinkled his face in anger and frustration and cursed about "Stupid surface dweller riddles" The Cave Walker, leaned back and took out some of his powders he used for his work and poored a little on his gloved hand and and blew on paper. He hope that his "Ghost powder" will reveal what on the paper. He looked at the protractor with eyes that said "If you fail me, I will litertally skin you alive"
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Post by samfan911 on Aug 29, 2006 15:59:20 GMT -5
Jade wrote down I'm going to turn it in, because we're running out of time Jade walks to the proctor and smiles. She look at the girl next to her and smiles at her.
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Post by Zukosfire5 on Aug 29, 2006 16:25:31 GMT -5
"Yes, we should probably start trying to figure it out. I saw one guy dip his in water, so maybe we should do that?" Liu Mei replied.
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Post by syarafire on Aug 29, 2006 17:12:02 GMT -5
Mali shrugged. As far as she could tell, nothing had happened to the paper, but the proctor had said he'd give them a riddle if they handed in the paper. ...Even if they had no clue, they might as well try. And they were runnning out of time. Mali stood up and brought her own paper to the proctor, standing next to Jade.
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Post by Horyo on Aug 29, 2006 21:46:20 GMT -5
"THe riddle is:
Waiting in patience, Lost in time, You who've not quit, have passed by the end of this rhyme.
Congrautlations, for those who stayed and posted, this shows your character interactions with each other, and how you communicate during (RP) life. Therefore those who stayed with us will have passed. Now meet outside with your partners, and await the 2nd exam. By the way, this was to test your patience and will, you should NEVER give up on an RP, you should be willing to take chances, and those who got frustruated showed human emotion, as in NON-Mary sue feelings during uncertainty and not knowing, good job."
The proctor said, and he added one more detail.
"By the way, HOryo was actually a proctor, to test your first exam. Soba you will need to find another partner."
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Post by syarafire on Aug 29, 2006 22:02:04 GMT -5
Mali breathed a sigh of relief. Thank goodness, she thought, smiling slightly towards Jade. It would have been a real disappointment had she failed at only the second part of the test; then she would have come all this way for nothing. She stifled another yawn and stretched her arms before heading for the door to wait outside as the proctor had instructed.
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Post by iluvzuko on Aug 29, 2006 22:03:20 GMT -5
"Wow............it was that EASY.........." Sui was surprised. She began to think of the next portion of the exam. Wait......I don't know my partners name. In a whisper she told her partner,"What's your name? Mine's Sui-Kyoung but you can call me Sui. Come on let's get ready." She smiled and felt real proud of herself of how good she was doing. What would Father say now. He'd be proud of me and not of my two older sisters. My mother would give me a hug and kiss me on my forehead. Grandmother would say,"See, my young Sui. YOU DID IT!! Oh, I am so proud of you." How I long to be with my family now. What about Lee what would he say? She gave a long sigh and thought about the boy she admired and how proud her family would be.
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Post by Horyo on Aug 29, 2006 22:54:59 GMT -5
The next part of the exam will be when the others recover form the end of this one.
But first to point out some problems wiht moderate Rpers. This is not bashing/flaming this is constructive crit.
Jade-She should be more specific about what she does. And for future references Role playing is generally in the PAST tense, so it seems like that action happened while other actions occur slightly later. And you should add in emotions, how does she feel or want to feel, what she would say and such. But good job. Also when Rping, you are in the third person. ONe of your posts said "Looks at paper..." You shouldn't do that, it lacks a subject, who looked at the paper? More like, and Jade looked at the paper...
Sui-To be excited by the end of the exam like that is one thing. But to think it's easy is another. I like how you mention her emotions, but you were redundant when you wrote the last line in your last post. You could say, she was enjoying the fact of remembering her family and the man she loves/admired, and thus she gave a light sigh. Also back to the test, the test wasn't easy, it was confusing and riddled with confusion, I suggest you should be more active in your interactions, you could give supporting ideas, repeat ideas and such.
Horyo- My character was a purposeful sue, and meant to throw all of you off by the lame writing style and poor usage of grammar. Also he seemed to know what to do, if I were not a proctor tha might have been different, therfore this was a pitfall to see if you all would fall into it, which some of you did. Remember when writing during RP, use YOUR style, not someone else's, but don't defy any rules of grammar or style.
Mali, Soba, Liu Mei-Pretty good characters. Some spelling errors but that can be endured.
Trust me, all of your characters are so much better than the ones I've seen. And for those who didn't get as much crit, you will later on...For those who did get crit, use it to your advantage, you now have a reference to compare, you don't HAVE to use it, but I recomend it.
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Post by writer on Aug 30, 2006 7:18:55 GMT -5
Soba looked around feeling foolish and annoyed. He got up and journeyed outside and sat down. He sat down and looked around for a partner. Now that he lost Horyo. Soba sighed and looked Mali asking visually if she could be his partner
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Post by The Blank Magician on Aug 30, 2006 9:58:23 GMT -5
Shinju waited patiently outside for the other testies. Even though she had not been there for the first exam, the procter had let her in...perhaps only because of her uncle's influential friendship with him. A drop of sweat rolled down the side of her face as she noticed someone walk out the door. He didn't look her way, for which she was grateful.
They'll think I cheated... She thought and let out a quiet sigh. She looked up again as the young man who had walked outside spoke to one of the other exam students, asking if they would like to be partners. Shinju smiled and strolled casually over to them both, her long black braid swinging cheerfully behind her.
"Excuse me, but I think that she," Shinju pointed to the girl (Mali). "Already has a partner."
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Post by samfan911 on Aug 30, 2006 12:01:09 GMT -5
Jade goes in the room in wondering what the riddle means. Jade sat down next to Mali happyly.She heard what Soba ask. Jade raise an eyebrow. She gave Soba a pleasant look and smiled. She whispers to Soba,"She's my parnter, sorry. "Jade looks at the riddle then at Mali. Jade wrote, Any ideas
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