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Post by *Erin* on Mar 7, 2008 18:35:41 GMT -5
ilovethisshow:
First of all, being a writer myself, I know that it takes a lot to post your own writing for everyone to read. You should get a round of applause for that alone.
Secondly, IMO, you have a decent start to this fic. At times, it does drift from the show, but it kept my attention throughout the story. Also, with a little more development, I think that Ozana could be a very interesting character.
Personally, I think that you should keep this fic going.
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Post by ilovethisshow on Mar 9, 2008 0:38:59 GMT -5
Alright, i added more thought to it. Is it any better?
and thank you Erin [ships Kataang] and everyone else who has been comenting.
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Post by Sakura on Mar 15, 2008 10:35:49 GMT -5
Hello, new writer! There were some- actually, probably lotsa- errors, but I have a question: How the heck did you come up with this idea?! You must've done some serious thinking, right? I guess its a nice idea... and the quote "I am the royal family" is nice, I guess... But maybe you need to add more EMOTION and SOUL to your piece. Don't worry though; it could've been very, very worse, right?
XD *karma* to you!
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Post by ilovethisshow on Mar 16, 2008 0:19:09 GMT -5
thanks and actualy it was much much worse before i tampered with it some more. actualy this idea just hit me one day.
by the way could you tell me what i need to do to make it better?
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Post by firefists101 on Mar 26, 2008 13:26:10 GMT -5
I thought you did pretty good on it. =]
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