Pleading Eyes
Kyoshi Mai
I feel violated... and crispy
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Post by Pleading Eyes on Jan 13, 2007 23:21:00 GMT -5
You never cease to amaze, Nandireya!
*karmas*
Itoko is very interesting, and I get the feeling that there's much more to the mysterious creature than you're letting on...
Also, excellent job bringing back old characters; Jee and Chey! Very Avatar-style. And it shows how sometimes, when you touch the lives of a few people you never think you'll see again, it comes back to you.
Oh, I can't even begin to say enough about this fic! It's so good! And you show a mastery of words. I'm only sad that Zuko's been separated from his Uncle... I hope he and Iroh meet up again before the end.
Well, I impatiently await your next chapter! And maybe some more fanart too.
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Post by night on Jan 13, 2007 23:35:12 GMT -5
PWNAGEE =D
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Pleading Eyes
Kyoshi Mai
I feel violated... and crispy
Posts: 2,327
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Post by Pleading Eyes on Jan 13, 2007 23:52:40 GMT -5
^My sentiments exactly.
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Post by avatarspirit on Jan 13, 2007 23:54:40 GMT -5
This story just ROCKS!
*bows* Teach me your writing wisdom, oh great one!
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nandireya
Zuko's Path to Redemption Mod
...tickled pink...
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Post by nandireya on Jan 14, 2007 0:17:31 GMT -5
My wisdom? Read a lot and write a lot...and do crosswords...you can really increase your vocabulary that way...
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Post by avatarspirit on Jan 14, 2007 0:21:49 GMT -5
My wisdom? Read a lot and write a lot...and do crosswords...you can really increase your vocabulary that way... *salutes* Yes great master! Though I hate crosswords.....
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Post by Ikkin on Jan 14, 2007 3:42:16 GMT -5
I've been loving your story so far. ^_^ Zuko is entirely in character, you bring in secondary characters in interesting and logical ways, and your OCs seem to perfectly fit in with the Avatar world. And I'm starting to like Itoko already. ;D The scene where Zuko fights the soldiers who are taxing people into the ground is something I could see happening in the show (and would really like to see, as well...). It's a great way to show Zuko just how the war's been affecting people. The only (hopefully constructive ^_^; ) criticism I have is that there have been a few times where things have been misspelled. But, that's easily fixed, and doesn't take much away from your story, because the rest of it makes up for it. And, to show you how much I've been enjoying this, I made you fanart. ^_^ Because the scene where Ozai kicks the scroll from Zuko's hands inspired me (and the opportunity to draw Zuko in his new outfit was too good to pass up ).
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nandireya
Zuko's Path to Redemption Mod
...tickled pink...
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Post by nandireya on Jan 14, 2007 4:06:22 GMT -5
The only (hopefully constructive ^_^; ) criticism I have is that there have been a few times where things have been misspelled. But, that's easily fixed, and doesn't take much away from your story, because the rest of it makes up for it. Spelling is often a problem for me...I have an extended vocabulary, but I often can't spell the words I can say...or I type similar words, such as 'quite' and 'quiet', as my fingers tend to have trouble keeping up with my brain when I'm on a roll...and it's very hard to proofread your own writing...you read what you meant to write not what you actually wrote…though I do try very hard to get things right...it's not just a difference between American-English and Australian-English is it? And Yah! I inspired fanart! Sweet ;D I shared this in the Fashiko thread so I may as well post it here too...it would have been eventually anyway...it was mentioned in this chapter, I was just kinda saving it for the next one...but what the heck... Zuko's new wanted poster:
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Post by Victim ~*of *~Circumstances on Jan 14, 2007 5:36:52 GMT -5
Awesome chapters, especially since Jee and Chey showed up. They came into the story rather nicely and so did Itoko even though he's an OC. Nicely done, I wonder what'll happen to Zuko next. ^_^
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Post by night on Jan 15, 2007 16:00:00 GMT -5
The only (hopefully constructive ^_^; ) criticism I have is that there have been a few times where things have been misspelled. But, that's easily fixed, and doesn't take much away from your story, because the rest of it makes up for it. Spelling is often a problem for me...I have an extended vocabulary, but I often can't spell the words I can say...or I type similar words, such as 'quite' and 'quiet', as my fingers tend to have trouble keeping up with my brain when I'm on a roll...and it's very hard to proofread your own writing...you read what you meant to write not what you actually wrote…though I do try very hard to get things right...it's not just a difference between American-English and Australian-English is it? And Yah! I inspired fanart! Sweet ;D I shared this in the Fashiko thread so I may as well post it here too...it would have been eventually anyway...it was mentioned in this chapter, I was just kinda saving it for the next one...but what the heck... Zuko's new wanted poster: omgah smexy =3
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Post by volcomxreckless on Jan 16, 2007 17:34:05 GMT -5
Yeah more please.. Except I just didn't like the Zutara moment! lol
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Post by avatarspirit on Jan 19, 2007 21:56:15 GMT -5
Are you going to write more?
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nandireya
Zuko's Path to Redemption Mod
...tickled pink...
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Post by nandireya on Jan 20, 2007 2:23:26 GMT -5
Of course...I have a beginning...a middle...and an end...like all good stories should have...I even have a little epilogue planned ;D
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Post by night on Jan 20, 2007 23:54:19 GMT -5
Of course...I have a beginning...a middle...and an end...like all good stories should have...I even have a little epilogue planned ;D Oooh rly? =O
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nandireya
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Post by nandireya on Jan 21, 2007 0:06:38 GMT -5
Yes...and I may work in the 'Lu Ten taught Zuko swordplay' as recently discussed in the 'Zuko and his Broadswords' thread...
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