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Post by tvman117 on Dec 10, 2006 21:01:16 GMT -5
Here is Chapter 7. I am really sorry i posted Chapter 8 before 7 I still cant believe i did that but here's 7 thats probly why 8 made no sense.
Book 5: Shadow Chapter 7: Shocking Discoveries
Sokka rushed to Aang's door and began to slam his fist on the door. “Aang, Aang, open up!” yelled Sokka. Aang crawled out of bed and opened the door. “What is it?” asked a drowsy Aang. “There was a break in within the palace last night” said Sokka. “What, is every one ok?” asked Aang who was now wide-awake. “No, one of the guards was hurt pretty bad, he’s in critical condition right now,” replied Sokka who shot up with hope. “Well he’s going to be ok right,” said Aang. Sokka stared at the floor for a moment and stayed silent. “Oh I see,” replied Aang. “Look, I bet this guy left some trace of evidence around we should look around,” said Sokka. “Alright just let me get changed quick and all be right out,” said Aang.
The two first checked the scene where Zhu had been attacked. “Nothing here” said Sokka as he inspected the area. “Hey I bet he had to break a lock to get in here maybe we can find it,” said Aang. Aang and Sokka checked almost every door and window and found nothing. “This is pointless,” said a frustrated Sokka. “This guy must have been really good at getting into places, I have never seen anything like this before” said Aang. “I bet that who ever it broke into the palace use to be part of the Dai Li, or one of Ozai’s followers and is now one of those blasted renegades” stated Sokka. “Well maybe I just don’t know,” said Aang. “What if it was an inside job?” asked Sokka. “Sokka you really think one of Zuko’s loyal soldiers would do that” replied Aang. “How would I know maybe we should ask the Fire Lord” said Sokka.
When Sokka and Aang entered the throne room Zuko was sitting up in his chair rubbing his forehead. “Huh, oh Aang, Sokka what are you two doing here?” asked Zuko. “Well we have reason to think this may have been a possible inside job,” said Sokka. “What did you just say, I just had to break the news to that man’s family and you dare accuse one of my most trusted men!” yelled Zuko, the flames in front of him beginning to rapidly increase in size. “Zuko calm down we just want to find the guy who did this” said Aang. “I saw that man with my two eyes and he was no fire bender, earth bender or any other person from a nation” stated Zuko. “Well what did you see?” asked Aang. Zuko paused for a moment before answering, “He wore black cloths, similar to an air benders robes I suppose I don’t know the exact fashion of your people, and he wore black gloves and shiny black boots” said Zuko. “Well what about his face what did he look like” asked Sokka. “He had no face, well he had the structure of some ones face but no eyes, no mouth” replied Zuko. “He must have been wearing a mask,” Sokka muttered to himself. Aang sat there puzzled for a few minutes before rushing out the door. “Where’s he going, Aang!” yelled Sokka. “I’ll see you in Ba Sing Se in a few days at the meeting!” yelled Aang as he rushed down the hall and towards Appa.
That morning Katara was still in Omashu and decided to go pay Toph a visit. She knocked on the side door of the earth-bending academy. “Katara I thought you were leaving for Ba Sing Se” said Toph. “Nope I have one more day here, so I thought me and you could do something?” asked Katara “You want to go down to the market?” said Toph. “Sure” replied Katara. Toph went back inside briefly to grab her bag and the two girls were off. The market was busy that morning, people had to push there way through just to get to a store they like. “Wow look at that bag Toph” said an excited Katara. Toph just stared at Katara for a moment with an angry expression. “I can’t believe I still do that,” laughed Katara. “Well go buy it then” said Toph. Katara paid for the bag and was examining it when some man grabbed it from her. “Hey!” yelled Katara. Katara looked to her side when she realized she had forgotten her small vase of water at Toph's home. “Oh no I was filling it up and I left it in your kitchen” said Katara. “Don’t worry all just hit him with a big chunk of rock” said a battle ready Toph. “No there are too many people around someone might get hurt,” said Katara. The man was getting away when a scruffy looking man tackled him. “You shouldn’t be stealing ladies pursues” said Ruan as he snatched Katara’s bag away from the dazed thief. “I think this is yours,” said Ruan. Ruan was a twenty one year old scruffy looking man. His brown hair was messy and he looked like he wasn’t from the upper class of Ba Sing Se. “Thanks” said Katara as she blushed. “No problem, see you around” said Ruan as he gave a wink to Katara and walked away. Katara laughed like a little schoolgirl. “Katara, looks like you have a little crush on that guy” said Toph. “No I don’t” said Katara. “You forget I can tell if you’re lying,” laughed Toph. “Lets just finish our shopping,” said Katara. “What ever you say,” laughed Toph.
Appa flew through the skies over the ocean late that afternoon. He could see the coastline of the Earth kingdom and where the village was located. The fog was gone that day and when Aang came to the village he was shocked. Nothing the village was gone. A puzzled Aang headed over to the Shadow pass, it was gone too. “What is going on?” Aang muttered to himself. Everything was gone almost like nothing was ever there. Aang jumped back on Appa and headed south to visit an old friend and teacher.
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 11, 2006 23:48:05 GMT -5
Here is chapter 8. Please leave your comments, questions and advice it is greatly appreciated.
Book 5: Shadow Chapter 8: A Place In My Dreams
The next morning Aang came to his destination. The southern air temple. The temple was beautiful in the night, with warm orange lights shining out from all the windows, which made it quite the place to be. Appa landed near the bison stables where a young monk greeted Aang.
“Avatar Aang” greeted the monk with a polite boa.
“Where is Guru Pathik?” asked Aang.
“Ah master Pathik is in his corridors at this time of night” replied the monk.
“Take my bison into the stables he needs to rest” ordered Aang.
“Of course” said the monk, but Aang didn’t hear him account he was all ready running up the front steps of the temple. Aang rushed through the corridors and up the stairs almost knocking down a few hundred-year-old monks passing by. Aang got to the top of the temple a few minutes later where Pathik was.
“Guru Pathik open up!” yelled Aang as he pounded on the door.
The large wooden creaked open as the elderly man pushed it open.
“Aang what are you doing here at this time of night?” asked Pathik.
“I need to come in, I have to talk to you about something” said Aang as he let himself in.
“Ok then” said Pathik.
Aang entered the room and dropped to his knees.
“Something is happening to me,” moaned Aang.
“I don’t understand you will need to make it more clear” said a serious Pathik.
“Ever since I went to that cursed cave all of a sudden I will just black and wake up some where not remembering what just happened?” said Aang.
Pathik was in a deep thought for a moment thinking about something.
“You taught me how to control my avatar state, cant you help me with this?” groaned Aang.
“Aang I do not know what is happening to you, if it even is anything” said Pathik.
“The cave I went into when I went back, it was gone” said Aang.
“Maybe your avatar state is causing this, and if it is you need to regain your focus and contain it,” suggested Pathik.
Aang got up from his knees and asked “How?”
“The same way as last time, with calm breathing and peace, also known as deep meditation” said Pathik.
“Alright” said a calmed down Aang
The two sat down and closed their eyes and began to enter a deep meditation.
Aang began run through the jungle knocking into trees and falling to the ground. He came out of the jungle emerging into the volcanic land outside the fire nation capitol.
Zuko was lying on the ground beaten badly.
“Zuko!” yelled Aang as he ran towards him.
But it all went away when everything faded to black. Aang stood in pitch black when a turtle bumped into him. Aang looked down at the turtle as it looked at him. The turtle began to amazingly run at fast speeds across the void. Aang began to chase it, as it seemed to be leading him somewhere. As Aang ran across the empty void a phoenix and dragon zoomed overhead following the turtle. As soon as they passed a Qilin appeared running side by side with him. Aang began to loose his breath as the four animals shot off into the distance. He dropped to the ground, as he was exhausted. When Aang raised his head he was in a jungle. A ray if light shot through the trees and onto a small shrine with four statues of a turtle, phoenix, dragon, and qilin surrounding it. Aang began to approach the shrine when suddenly he was back in Guru Pathik's room.
“Aang time to go” said Pathik.
“How long was I like that for?” asked Aang as he rubbed his eyes.
“All night its morning and its time to go” replied Pathik.
“That’s right Ba Sing Se I forgot” said Aang as he got up.
“Come, Monk Fujin has just put out some fresh fruit pies, maybe we can sneak one,” laughed an excited Pathik.
Aang’s stomach groaned as he followed the old Guru out the door as they went for some breakfast, and then were off to Ba Sing Se.
Katara said her good byes to Toph that morning and was getting ready to cross the earth kingdom. She was stopped when Ruan came by.
“So where you off to so soon beautiful?” asked Ruan.
“Oh well, im representing the southern water tribe in front of the worlds leaders,” said an embarrassed Katara.
“Oh I see, so what your some kind of stuck up politician,” teased Ruan.
“No, but some one has to do it, and what’s so special what do you do for a living” replied Katara.
“Me, you know odd job’s just stuff I suppose,” replied Ruan.
“Oh so your like a mercenary then” said Katara.
“I guess you could call it that, but im not like most of them” said Ruan
“Right” said Katara as she rolled her eyes.
“Hey you know if you have room, would you mind if I tagged along to Ba Sing Se, Omashu is a drag,” laughed Ruan.
“Well sorry to disappoint you but Ba Sing Se isn’t much different, but sure I suppose there’s room left” said Katara.
Ruan hopped aboard and they left for the big city.
Zhuang and Long Feng walked downstairs to the basement of the small building located between the outer and inner wall of Ba Sing Se.
“So what is this you wish to show me?” asked Long Feng.
“First we need to talk Long Feng, you need to know that I am running the show here your number two because when you have been locked up for the last seven years I have been running this army” said Zhuang, the former fire nation general who followed Fire Lord Ozai.
“I understand,” said Long Feng who did not look pleased.
“Luoyang bring it over here!” commanded Zhuang.
Luoyang ran over carrying a small black ball which could sit in some ones palm.
Zhuang pulled a small vase of black powder from his cloak and poured the powder into the ball.
“I don’t see the point of this,” said Long Feng.
“Patience, now watch” replied Zhuang. He took the small ball and placed on the ground. He raised his index finger and lit a flame from his finger. He used the small flame to light the ball blowing it up creating a small explosion like a firecracker.
“You are wasting my time,” said Long Feng.
“Ah this is why you do not run this legion of men, come” commanded Zhuang.
The two men walked a few feet and two a railing, which went overhead where men were working. Renegade soldiers will filling up huge bombs like the one Zhuang just blew up.
“Now imagine the fire power of these,” laughed Zhuang.
“Impressive, but what do you purpose to do with them?” asked Long Feng.
“Three days from now the kings, monks, lords, and generals meet in the Ba Sing Se palace in three days. We could end this war with one fatal blow,” laughed Zhuang.
“It is a could plan but it has one flaw” said Long Feng.
“Yes and what would that be?” asked Zhuang.
“How do you plan on moving four hundred’s of pounds bombs across the city into the center.
“Well uh” stuttered Zhuang.
“Sir my I suggest something?” asked Luoyang
“Say it then soldier” said Long Feng.
Luoyang grabbed a large scroll and unraveled it across the table; it was a map of Ba sing Se.
“Long Feng sir since you have been gone the public trains have seen much improvement” said Luoyang.
“I like where this is going soldier continue,” said Long Feng.
“Well the trains now run into four stations within the palace, this could allow us to get the bombs within the palace easily,” stated Luoyang as he used his finger to show the routes of the trains.
Long Feng scratched his chin as he grinned an evil smile.
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Post by Jenny Lee on Dec 12, 2006 6:39:19 GMT -5
Okay, now it makes more sense. Great job!
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 12, 2006 17:39:34 GMT -5
Okay, now it makes more sense. Great job! Hey thanks for all the comments it's nice to finally get some.
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Post by Jenny Lee on Dec 12, 2006 17:58:52 GMT -5
Your welcome, I love reading them.
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 13, 2006 21:53:52 GMT -5
Here is chapter 9. Please leave your comments, questions and advice. This chapter is the shortest and a filler i admit but it sets it up for chapter 10 which i really put alot into.
Book 5: Shadow Chapter 9: The Meeting of Two Friends
The golden sun rose over the sleeping city of Ba Sing Se that morning. Merchants were preparing their goods for the coming busy day; farmers picked their crops to send into the city, and the day shift guards heading to their posts. Zuko stood outside looking into the warm morning sky. Haru walked out from the palace and approached the troubled Zuko.
“I see you’re uneasy about the meeting,” said Haru.
“You know some of the looks I get from some of these people, at least half of them think that I am going to attempt to dominate the other nations like my father, grandfather, and great grandfather” replied Zuko.
Haru sighed and said “You know I went through the same thing as you, having to be a ruler at a young age, not really knowing what to do, the people were worried about me but they came around” encouraged Haru.
“Its not the same, at least people did not have to worry about you going senile and attempting to conquer the other nations!” yelled Zuko.
“Your different then them Zuko and you know that, when your father used Sozin’s mask and used the entire power of the comet on himself, well that beast he became it just showed what he truly was, but you, your different” said Haru.
“Ya well to bad others don’t see it as the way you say it is” stated Zuko.
“Well im sure they will give you a chance in time, but at least that cursed mask is gone I had nightmares about that giant winged demon like thing” laughed Haru.
“Right” said Zuko as he looked guilty of something.
Haru stared at Zuko for a moment before saying “You still have it don’t you, do you know what would happen if this got out!” yelled Haru.
“Look it’s a relic among my people, and what if something was to ever happen,” said Zuko as he was cut short by Haru.
“If you what, used it” said Haru.
“It’s put away safely,” said Zuko.
“I stood up for you and now you pull this!” yelled Haru as he pointed his finger at Zuko.
“Its part of the heritage of my people, how would you like it if I said you had to destroy your earth hat” said Zuko.
“I have like five so it’s not a big deal. Now listen I trust you so I wont tell any one about this, but you better have that thing kept away Zuko,” said Haru as he walked back into the palace.
Zuko turned around and began to look into the sky as he noticed a group of bison’s heading towards the palace.
Aang and Appa were ahead of the herd of flying bison as the group of Air Nomads headed towards the palace. The group of several bisons landed near the front gates. Aang jumped down atop Appa and landed softly on the ground. He looked around noticing all the important people of the world greeting each other and heading into the enormous palace. He noticed a small cart heading towards the gates. Hoping it was Katara he went down to see her. Aang’s hopes were quickly shot down when he saw Katara laughing and talking with Ruan. He stepped back as he held his head low in disappointment.
“I guess this is it,” said Ruan.
“Well im sure I will see you again,” replied Katara.
“Hope so” said Ruan as he smirked and jumped off the small wagon. He then headed off into the hustle and bustle of the city not looking back.
“Aang!” said Katara as she noticed the sulking man.
“Oh Katara I didn’t see you there” lied Aang.
“Hey you know Aang last time when we tried to catch up we got kind of interupted so, you maybe want to go get some lunch? It’s still a couple hours before I have to be in the palace,” asked Katara.
“Sure” replied Aang as he barely gave Katara any time to finish speaking.
“Well lets get going then, I know a good restaurant not far from here,” said Katara.
Aang helped Katara get down from her seat and the two began to walk into the city.
Sokka happily walked down the halls of the palace as he was looking for Liuli. That’s when he noticed a group of Kyoshi warriors heading his way.
“Oh no, Suki” Sokka muttered to himself as he looked down the hall to the left of him.
He made a quick right when he noticed Liuli heading towards him as well.
“Not good” he muttered to himself again. Sokka attempted to try to find some place to quickly hide account he didn’t want the girl he had an on again off again relationship with, and the new girl in his life to run into each other. Suki and a few other Kyoshi warriors walked by as did Liuli. Sokka poked his head from around one of the decorated pillars and breathed a sigh of relief.
Aang and Katara sat at their small table in the restaurant staying pretty quite.
“Well maybe this wasn’t the best idea,” said Katara as she looked around at everyone in the restaurant staring at the two. The two’s silence was broken when they heard a women across the room pointing out the window and screaming.
“Wow what is it?” asked Aang.
“The train look how fast it’s going,” replied the lady. Katara and Aang rushed out the door to see a speeding train rush towards the palace.
“Aang we have to do something” said Katara.
Aang just stared at the train.
“Aang are you listening!” yelled Katara, as she looked at Aang whose eyes and arrow tattoo glowed a bright white light.
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 13, 2006 21:55:06 GMT -5
Here is chapter 10. Please leave your comments, questions and advice it is greatly appreciated. I really worked hard on this one and its my longest one so far so please leave comments.
Book 5: Shadow Chapter 10: Runaway Locomotive
The train was speeding towards the palace and it needed to be stopped. Aang activated his avatar state and began to focus on the speeding train. Katara backed up away from the powerful avatar as he used a large gust of wind to launch himself into the sky and onto the tracks. Katara stood in front of the restaurant as she watched Aang fly through the sky. He landed atop the train’s railway, which stood over the hustle and bustle of the city. It headed towards Aang at top speed as he just stood there not flinching. His eyes and tattoo still glowing bright.
“Hey is that a guy out there?” said one of the Renegade soldiers who were standing in cockpit of the train.
“Who cares, he wont be there much longer,” replied the other soldier. Outside the train Aang moved his arms sending a shot of wind from his hand, which then turned more into a fury of wind so powerful it began to slow the speeding train. The train slowly approached him, its windows shattered. The train came to a halt and Aang jumped in through the front window. Dai Li, and Ozai’s former followers were groaning as they got up from the ground brushing the glass from their cloths off. Aang stood at the front of the train as he looked at the soldiers and the large bomb sitting at the back of the train. For a moment the soldiers stared at Aang as he stared at them.
“Ok can we just do this easily, sure you guys can try to attack me but all just end up beating you all badly. So why don’t you guys just back down now?” asked Aang with a small smirk.
The soldiers looked at each other for a moment before all trying to attack Aang at once. Several men attempted to all jump him at once but they were no match. Aang bounced them back with a wave of flames knocking them on their backs. They got up and looked around before they began to panic for some reason as they scurried out the train’s side’s doors and ran down the track.
“Finally someone has the right idea,” Aang muttered to himself. What he didn’t realize however is that when he sent a wave of fire from himself he had accidentally lit the fuse to the bomb. He had no time to react as the small flame moved up the fuse and into the bomb. It quickly exploded turning the train and part of the railway into scrap. Aang used an old fire bending trick in which he used a wall of fire to protect himself from the damage of the explosion. He plummeted down with debris of railway, as he was about to land face first into the ground when Appa grabbed him. Aang looked up to see Katara bright smile atop Appa’s sattle.
“Aang what just happened?” asked Katara.
“Renegade soldiers were taking a bomb somewhere now head for the train coming from the south, I think something is going down today and they have another one!” yelled Aang from down below where Appa was holding him.
Appa turned around and headed for the next train.
Sokka was strolling down the halls of the palace hallways when a bunch of soldiers ran by bumping into him.
“Wow watch where you’re going” said Sokka as he rubbed his shoulder. One of the men came to a halt and said
“My apologizes General Sokka, but there is an incident at the front gates and it needs the royal guards attention”. He then began to run after the other guards to catch up.
“Hold on i'm coming!” yelled Sokka. He emerged out the palace doors when he saw a about a hundred renegade soldiers fighting earth kingdom soldiers.
“How did they get in here isn’t this place protected?” asked Sokka.
“They had to have come from the catacombs it’s the only entrance which in not protected, Long Feng must have told them about it” replied the soldier.
“Well let’s worry about that later, right now we have to go help those troops,” said Sokka.
“They have a trebuchet!” yelled some one fighting in the battle in the battle.
“What!” yelled Sokka back, but it was too late. A huge hunk of some sort of substance on fire flew through the air crashing near the palace, sending Sokka and the soldiers near him to the ground. His hears rang from the explosion as he pulled himself up and heard the faint voices of the other men yelling
“Where’s the general”
“I think we lost him,” yelled the other.
“I’m not done yet,” muttered Sokka. He pulled his sword from its scabbard placed at his side. He ran through the black smoke where the object hit and charged into battle.
Zuko was heading back to his room unaware of what was happening outside. He opened the door to his room when he found Long Feng sitting in a chair waiting for him.
“You!” said Zuko, as he instantly got into a fire-bending stance.
“I would stop right there Fire Lord, unless you want her to get hurt” snickered Long Feng. Two Renegade soldiers came out from behind the door dragging Jin with them.
“Zuko help!” pleaded Jin
“Your going to regret this” said Zuko as he laid his hands down.
“Ah so the mighty Zuko does indeed have a weak spot. You know your sister may have been a manipulative back stabber but at least she was a strong leader,” said Long Feng, who was trying to tick the all ready angry Fire Lord off.
“What do you want then?” asked Zuko.
“The fire nations allegiance” replied Long Feng.
“What are you crazy I will no give my army to you” quickly said Zuko.
Long Feng nodded at the two men holding Jin. One pulled a small knife from his pocket and raised it upwards towards the scared Jin as she began to cry in fear.
“Leave her!” yelled Zuko.
“Then you know what you needs to be done. Resign the fire nations alliance to the other nations and join the Renegade group,” said Long Feng.
“Fine now let her go,” stated an angry Zuko.
“Now that’s where the problem is lad, see I don’t trust you and im sure you don’t trust me. So the girl comes with me until I have confirmation about the fire nations resignation” said Long Feng as he stood up from his chair.
“Then the deals off!” yelled Zuko.
“Quite the temper you have there, but I am truly sorry. I hope you make the right decision,” said Long Feng as him and his men walked out the door. One soldier through Jin over his shoulder as the other used earth bending to open a hole leading into the catacombs.
“Zuko!” yelled Jin as two soldiers jumped in.
“Hold on Jin all get you back!” yelled Zuko.
“Oh and Fire lord Zuko, don’t try to pull a fast one on me, I have eyes everywhere” laughed Long Feng as exited through the hole which then closed behind them.
Zuko smashed the wall with a friary fist in anger.
The southern train was closing in on the middle ring when Appa got near. Aang had crawled up Appa’s fur and was now atop Appa’s sattle.
“Katara here keep Appa steady,” said Aang. He passed the two ropes over to Katara. Appa flew overhead the speeding train. Aang stepped over the ledge of Appa’s sattle getting ready to dive atop the train.
“Aang, be careful” said a worried Katara.
Aang nodded at her and jumped from atop Appa as the fly bison flew off.
He landed face first slamming into the roof of the train and making a large clunk.
“Ow” groaned Aang
He grabbed onto a small emergency hatch in the roof with his right hand as he hung on for dear life as they train sped towards the palace. Aang grabbed on with his other hand and pulled himself towards the small hatch atop the train. He tried to pull the hatch open but it was useless. Aang began to crawl backwards to the middle if the train. Placing his two hands on the thin metal he began to heat the metal up. At first it simply got hot but as Aang tried harder it turned color to a bright orange. He focused harder at melting the roof, it now getting goopy and softer until the roof caved through. Aang jumped through the still hot hole and landed inside the train. He looked around the train, no one. He began to walk to the back of the train, ready to make a move at any time. As Aang moved on to the next cart he began to hear a rustling above him, like gears moving. He looked up to see a metal box wide open hanging above him. It quickly fell down trapping Aang with in it completely enclosing him. Zhuang and a group of renegade soldiers opened the door to the cart Aang was in.
“Well men it looks we have quite the catch here” laughed Zhuang as he knocked on the metal box which showed no opening.
“Let me out of here!” yelled Aang as he pounded on the metal box.
“Oh your not going any where, no earth air or water will work in there” said Zhuang.
“Ya well I still have flames, if you forgot” said Aang as he created two large fireballs in each of his hands.
“I wouldn’t do that Avatar, or else it might get very hot in there for you” said Zhuang.
Aang closed his fists as the flames disappeared making the small cell cover with darkness once again.
“Listen there are better ways of doing this” pleaded Aang as he sat in the metal box.
“Well we tried to reason but they just would not listen. So now we must take action and return the world back to the way it should be” said Zhuang.
“The nations are the way they should be, as one,” stated Aang.
“And that makes each nation weak, now I don’t have time to argue with you. Speaking to you was nice I hope you enjoyed it because it will be the last time you will be getting the chance to talk,” laughed Zhuang.
Two soldiers rolled one of the bombs up to the front of the train and placed it right in front of Aang’s cell. He began to pound on the inside of the cell harder and harder until he simply stopped.
“Ha he must have finally given up, now light the bomb and let’s get out,” commanded Zhuang as he looked on at the bomb and metal box.
The men holding the bomb simply stared at Zhuang their faces petrified.
“What are you waiting for were going to be at the palace soon light it!” yelled Zhuang. His face to soon turned scared when he felt breathing against the back of his neck. Zhuang turned around and was face to face with the figure draped in black air nomad cloths similar to Aangs and a black face with only a shape but no mouth or eyes. Zhuang and the soldiers were speechless as they looked on at him.
Sokka ducked under a Renegade soldiers axe as he swung it widely trying to hit him Sokka jumped up at the chance quickly as the Renegade left his face wide open. Sokka used the knob of his sword to hit the soldier in the face knocking him unconscious and leaving a big red mark in the middle of his head. Sokka breathed heavily as he looked down on the unconscious man. The Renegade’s were getting the upper hand now account of they just kept swarming out of the catacombs like there was no end, but the battle was about to turn. In the distance a cloud of dust appeared. It kept getting larger as it got closer until a man riding the rock towards the battle could be seen.
“It’s General Fong!” cheered a soldier.
“The battle is won!” yelled another.
Fong jumped of the pile of earth and landed on the ground. He hit the ground with his feet a few times sending waves through the ground knocking the entire Renegade army to there feet. Looking towards the trebuchets now Fong through a punch and a wall of sharp rock rose beneath the catapults shattering them.
“Get out of the Earth King’s land foul men!” yelled the battle hungry Fong who sent another wave of rock at the injured battalion of Renegade soldiers. They began to retreat through the hole they had climbed out of and back into the catacombs. Sokka ran up to Fong to talk to him.
“Alright lets get some troops and enter the catacombs,” said Sokka.
“No, we have bigger worries that was just a distraction to divert the militaries attention,” replied Fong who had worked up a sweat.
“I don’t get it what’s going on?” asked Sokka.
“Your sister has just informed me that the Renegade’s intend on launching an attack during the meeting of lords, Avatar Aang managed to stop one as did your sister, but now Aang has not been heard from since he went after the third train” said Fong.
“What about this fourth one?” asked Sokka.
“My men have tried to stop it but it’s going too fast,” said Fong.
Sokka was in a deep thought for a moment.
“I think I have a plan,” grinned Sokka.
Zhuang began to step back as the dark figure approached him. Grabbing Zhuang by the cloth underneath his armor he hoisted him up with one arm above the ground.
“Help me men help me soldiers!” yelled Zhuang. The Renegade soldiers all sent a stream of fire at once from all angles attacking the man, but when the flames cleared he was gone.
“That will teach you to mess with me, I am invincible” laughed Zhuang. His memorable speech didn’t last long however. For the dark figure was back without a scratch or tare in his cloths. Zhuang looked like he had seen a ghost and being the coward he was began to run away leaving his loyal men behind to suffer the mans wrath. A dozen soldiers charged at him but they were no match. The figure fought a style of fighting no one had ever seen almost like it was to a beat as he sent men flying backwards with punches and kicks. If one of the soldier’s attacks did get by he had his second hand blocking the attack. He even took one man by the collar and without a hesitation threw him right through the glass window and falling down into the city. He dodged every one of their attacks like it was nothing, beating down each man until they all lay out cold on the train floor. The stubby general didn’t get far down the train account the man had mopped the floor with his men in under a minute. Grabbing him from behind he dragged Zhuang back to where the bomb was.
“Please no! I can make a deal with you, I would be a powerful friend” pleaded and moaned Zhuang as he dragged across the floor. He didn’t listen however and threw the Renegade leader against the metal bow where Aang was being held.
“Please!” groaned Zhuang. The dark figure picked up the heavy bomb with ease and places it atop Zhuang’s foot.
“No! You can’t do this its wrong you cant!” yelled Zhuang who was now panicking.
“Watch Me,” said the figure as he used fire bending to light the fuse. Zhuang looked shocked as he recognized that voice. He began to try to pull his crushed leg from under the heavy bomb but it was useless.
“Wait! Wait!” yelled Zhuang
The dark figure exited the train and headed off as the locomotive blew to small pieces.
Long Feng and the defeated Renegades made there way through the catacombs of the palace making there way to the city outskirts. Two soldiers ran towards Long Feng from the distance.
“Long Feng, I have word Zhuang has been killed,” said the soldier.
“Good, better it done for me then myself having to do it,” replied Long Feng.
“But sir what will we do now?” asked the soldier carrying the unconscious Jin over his shoulder.
“I’m taking control, and will do what Zhuang could not, now is the fourth bomb still on its way” said Long Feng.
“Yes Sir” replied a soldier.
“Good, this day is looking up gentlemen, now we have work to do” stated Long Feng.
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Post by Jenny Lee on Dec 14, 2006 6:34:27 GMT -5
Great! I'm trying to figure out who the person in black is.
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 14, 2006 19:06:48 GMT -5
Here is chapter 11. Please leave your comments, questions and advice it is greatly appreciated. Im kind of dissapointed with the lack of response to the story I have worked so hard on so please comment!
Book 5: Shadow Chapter 11: The Face Of Darkness
The Dark figure jumped down from atop one of the small building under the now destroyed train tracks. He landed in a dark alley where it looked like no one had been in a while. The city was now in a state of panic, soldiers ran through the streets trying to control the frenzy of people and tending to the wounded. The dark figure poked his head out from behind a wall checking to see if the cost was clear. There were a dozen or so soldiers and citizens in the streets. Realizing that there was no way to get across the street with out diverting attention to him he needed a distraction.
“Cabbages, cabbages for sale!” yelled the Cabbage man behind his stall full of fresh green cabbage. The Cabbage man’s mood soon changed when the stall full of greens suddenly burst into flames.
“My cabbage’s!” yelled the cabbage man as he panicked around the fire. The soldier’s attention shifted as they crowded around the fire. Knowing this was his chance the man backed up against the wall. He breathed calmly and pressed his knuckles together. He dropped down into the shape of a small shadow. The small spot of darkness began to move as it crept quickly across the street behind the soldiers and back around into the alleyways across the street. The man rose back up from the shadow as he regained his solid form. He looked around and noticed a boarded up tea shop over the small wall and across the street. He transformed back into a shadow again and teleported inside the shop. It was a mess inside; papers lay scattered on the ground, tables flipped over and silver where scattered on the floor. The man picked up a small paper reading: Welcome to the Jasmine Dragon. Disregarding the note he threw it to the ground. The man walked to the middle of the dark boarded up room and sat down as he began to meditate.
The last train was getting closer and closer towards the vunrable palace as it zoomed past each station.
“Bring the bomb up to the front we will be there soon!” commanded a Renegade lieutenant.
“Uh sir I think we have a problem!” said the soldier as he pointed out the side window.
A large war balloon ship rose from the city as it moved side by side with the train.
“Increase the speed, earth soldiers get ready, you two steer west!” yelled Sokka as he barked out orders. Soldiers of the earth kingdom ran towards the steer of the ship facing the train. General Fong ran out from the line of men as he approached Sokka.
“Sokka my boy if this manages to slow the train down you better get ready to jump” said Fong.
“Don’t worry I can make it, I have legs like an air bender” laughed Sokka.
“Ha-ha good one” chuckled Fong.
“Fire!” yelled Fong as he waved his hand. The soldiers raised their fists as they shot pellets of rock at the train. They were more like bullets then rock as they put hole after hole into the train and shattering the windows as well. The two vessels races side-by-side rocks and flames spitting between the two. Sokka jumped to the ground covering his head as he just dodged a stream of fire coming from the train.
“Sokka lets go!” yelled Fong across the ships deck. The crazed General formed a plank of rock, which almost touched the train. He ran across the plank and made a jump for the train landing atop the roof. Sokka hesitated for a moment before finally mustering up the courage to jump. He ran across the small bridge connected to the ship and dove into the air. For a second or two he sat in mid air before beginning to fall just short of the train. A hand grabbed his arm just as he was about to fall to his demise. Sokka looked up to see General Fong with an angry expression on his face.
“Sokka, your going to kill yourself that way next time tell me you cant make it” said Fong as he hoisted Sokka up with one arm.
“Sorry” replied Sokka as he was getting his balance atop the speeding train. A few more fire and earth benders had made there way atop the train as well as the group was getting ready to board the train.
“Now watch this trick, I bet your blind friend can’t do this Sokka,” laughed Fong. He placed his hands atop the roof and used the power of metal bending to rip open a hole in the roof.
“Ya she did that at twelve” said Sokka.
“Dammit, I thought I could prove my skill this time” replied a disappointed Fong.
“Hey don’t sweat it” stated Sokka as he jumped into the train. Sokka slashed through the rock’s the renegades shot at him as he gained ground on them. Fong and the other bender’s came to help as the battle within the train went on. Sokka battled onwards to the front of the train, knocking Renegades to their knees and sending a few out the window. The final bomb lay ahead in the next cart and Sokka and Fong were getting close. A lone soldier emerged from the door of the front cart. He bent down and pulled the screw connecting the two carts out. A rift between the two carts began to open as all the back carts began to slow down. Sokka jumped across the opening quickly as the battle remained in the back carts. He punched the guard out and ran through the carts door. The fuse had been lit and Sokka had only a few minutes. He raised his sword to cut the fuse but was stopped when a Renegade from behind grabbed him. He put Sokka in a full nelson maneuver and the young general was stuck. Another guard grabbed Sokka sword from the ground and got ready to hit him. Sokka put his arms up in the air and dropped down getting out of the hold. The soldier hit his fellow soldier in the stomach with the sword and he dropped. Sokka jumped up and knocked out the other soldier with a punch to the face. The flame on the fuse was now almost within the bomb. With no time to properly stop the fuse he grabbed the flame with his bare hand. He bit hard on the blue water tribe cloth he wore as the flame went out and the skin on his palm burned. The flame was out and Sokka sat against the bomb looking at his hand. Earth kingdom and Fire nation soldiers were coming down from across the track. They opened the door to find the wounded general sitting there.
“Soldier go get help, General Sokka is injured!” yelled one of the captains. Fong entered the train as the soldier going for help exited.
“Come on, lets go” said Fong as he lifted Sokka up from the ground.
“You did good,” said Fong.
The dazed Sokka walked out holding his burned hand as the two left the train finally stopping the Renegade’s attack.
Zuko pondered the halls of the palace wondering if he should listen to Long Feng and resign the Fire Nation, or deny him and possibly lose the only person left close to him. As people walked by he could only wonder if that was one of Long Feng’s men or just a member of the palace. Who knows how deep the roots of Long Feng’s infiltration went if there even was one. There was however one person he could trust and warn him about his decision. King Haru was in the throne room going over something when Zuko entered.
“What do you want?” asked Haru who was still angry with Zuko. Zuko looked around the room examining it closely making sure no one else was there.
“Long Feng was here,” stated Zuko.
“What, you could have caught him,” said Haru.
“He took Jin that’s why. If I could have stopped him I would have” stated an angry Zuko.
Haru expression turned from angry to sympathetic when he heard this.
“Oh I’m sorry, do you know why he took her in particular?” asked Haru.
“He wants the Fire Nation to join his cause, so if I do it we would just end up being where we were seven years ago” replied Zuko.
“Well you realize you can’t do what he’s asking,” stated Haru.
“He’s going to kill her if I don’t, so I need you to talk to Arnook and Pathik about it after all right. It’s the only way,” said Zuko.
“Zuko there’s bigger things then your little girl friend at stake im sorry but I will not do this” said Haru.
Zuko grabbed the earth king by the chest and pushed him back into the wall.
“Listen to me, I don’t have a choice Haru until I find her you need to keep the others under the suspicion that I have abandon you!” yelled Zuko. Haru raised a wall of rock from the ground separating the two. He pushed his hand out making the rock throw Zuko back a few feet.
“Don’t ever do that again, don’t think you can intimidate me just because you are a much better bender then I am!” demanded Haru.
Zuko pulled himself up and said, “I will do what I have to do. You know I am not siding with them so I hope you do the right thing” as he slammed the door behind him. Haru sat back in his chair as he thought on the issue the bestowed him.
The dark figure sat in the main room of the Jasmine Dragon in a deep meditation. It didn’t last long because something caught his attention from outside. The shadows of what appeared to be Earth Kingdom soldiers could be seen through the thin walls, they were outside. He still sat in the middle of the floor as he moved his head around watching there shadows move. They moved towards the door and it looked as if they were getting ready to break in. He sharply turned his head around. There was a rustling in the kitchen as well coming towards him. The soldiers broke the door down and charged in to find Ruan coming from the kitchen.
“What are you doing in this abandon tea shop sir?” questioned the captain as he approached Ruan.
“I heard explosions so I took shelter in here” replied a suspicious Ruan.
The soldier stared him down for a moment before saying “Alright its safe now and you need to leave” as he pointed Ruan towards the exit.
“Thank you sir” said Ruan as he walked out the door of the Jasmine Dragon and out into the city….
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Post by Jenny Lee on Dec 14, 2006 21:20:19 GMT -5
^ Awesome! I love the cliffhangers!
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 15, 2006 21:58:50 GMT -5
I'm really hoping to get some more comments from people here I have worked really hard on this. See I dont know if it is because maybe the story is boring and brutal but I cant fix that unless i get some advice from people so please can i get some more comments.
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Post by tvman117 on Dec 18, 2006 17:24:30 GMT -5
Due to lack of comments I may be ending the fic here unless I get more comments. If something is wrong with the story please speak up.
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