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Post by username on Jul 26, 2008 14:44:00 GMT -5
We told you already, you shouldn't need a key, let alone an inaccurate key. Dream fire nation palace day Sozins comet returns What is this a screenplay? The rest of the fic is written in the same style as your other work, to be honest, a poor style.
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Post by arbiter on Jul 26, 2008 14:48:40 GMT -5
The last chapter was edited several times before i posteed it the lines you quoated are to explain where the scene is set so my readers arent confused because when i first started writing most couldnt tell where the fanfic was set so i added those lines to help them.
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Post by Empy on Jul 26, 2008 15:32:10 GMT -5
That is one loooong sentence I think that you shouldn't need to state where or what the scene is taking place. Again, I still think that you should probably divide up the scenes and elaborate so that you don't have to state what the setting is in that manner. For example for the Island of Korane: The beetle-crickets chirped softly into the night as the group traversed settled down for the night. The Island of Korane was beautiful and the sights still astonished them even after three days. Or whatever. This gives the story more flow so you don't have to randomly have the setting. It's jarring and takes away from the story. If readers are confused, elaborate what's going on IN the story instead of detracting from it by writing it like a screenplay as kaneda said. Also, I still think your characters need to be revised. Green fire, vampirism, character killing, they are Gary-Stues and people don't care for those kinds of characters.
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Post by arbiter on Jul 26, 2008 15:46:08 GMT -5
the characters that were killed at the beginning were brought back besides i already revised several characters i have yet to inculde in this fanfic.
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Post by arbiter on Aug 8, 2008 15:49:25 GMT -5
heres chapter's 10 and 11 and i have decided not to inculde anymore OC'S in this fanfic 3 is enough.
Darkness into light
Chapter 10 questions answered and evil plans revealed
This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic
“ Thoughts
‘ Speech
Island of korane day
Kalo then replied ‘how many people has Ka Chein resurrected from the dead Zhao?’
Zhao then replied ‘including me and lady Ty Lee Kalo?, three the other was some earth kingdom freedom fighter named Jet’.
Kalo then turned around and he saw that Toph, Sokka, Katara and Aang were in shock at hearing this and Kalo then knew that they had met this ‘Jet’ person before.
Zhao then continued by saying ‘the dragon lord has a different colour flame then you do Kalo his is red, but it might be different now as he has been getting more powerful every day Sozins comet comes closer to returning’.
Kalo then said ‘and why Zhao are you working for the dragon lord?, what did he offer you a fair share of the gold after the world is destroyed’.
Zhao shook his head and said ‘he offered me my own life, in exchange for my services’.
Kalo then replied ‘and Zhao you know what happens when you serve a spirit, you found out what happens at the north pole and now you swore allegiance to the dragon lord Ka Chein, you are a bigger fool then I thought you were Zhao’.
Zhao then said ‘and what Kalo would you have me do, join you against the dragon lord and Ozai, that would be suicide Kalo and you know it’.
Kalo then replied ‘just tell us what the dragon lord has planned on the day the comet returns, and we will let you live, now do we have a deal Zhao?’.
Zhao was silent for several minutes then he nodded his head.
Kalo smiled then said ‘good now Zhao, you start talking’.
Fire nation fleet
A soldier ran up to Ty Lee and he said ‘our scout party is dead lady Ty Lee, and Admiral Zhao is missing, what shall we do?’.
Ty Lee then said in a cold voice so unlike her normal happy voice ‘get our fleet back to the Fire Nation now!’.
The soldier then left Ty Lee alone on the bridge as she looked out at the ocean and the island of Korane and then turned around and left the bridge.
Fire nation royal palace
The dragon lord Ka Chein was finished testing out his new powers and was very happy, now with his new black flames victory would be easier to achieve against his enemies.
Meanwhile fire lord Ozai was on his throne and he thought back over the years trying to figure out where he went wrong with Azula and Zuko wondering how they could possibly betray him.
And what he discovered was that he never once said I love you to them or his wife. But it was too late now Ozai had made his bed now he had to lie in it.
Island of korane
Kalo had asked Toph to release Zhao after he gave them the information they wanted and he was now seeing Zhao off in his river boat.
Kalo said ‘your best bet would be to head to the earth kingdom, and stay hidden make sure you aren’t caught by either side Zhao’.
The Admiral then said ‘I know what to do Kalo, good luck against Ka Chein your going to need it’.
Zhao then got in the river boat and he set sail to the southern earth kingdom after a few minutes the boat was gone.
Kalo then walked back to his tent hoping that the information Zhao gave them was true and that it would help on the day of their attack on the palace city.
Kalo then took out a vial of blood and drank it as he entered his tent and soon he fell asleep with no nightmares at all.
Meanwhile a certain air bender was talking to Mai about Zhao’s information. Aang then said ‘Mai why did Kalo let Zhao go?’.
Mai then relied ‘Zhao told Kalo the truth about the dragon lord’s plans and who he resurrected, so my brother paid him back by releasing him, but Kalo warned the Admiral that if this information was false, that Kalo would hunt Zhao down and kill him’.
Aang looked shocked but nodded in understanding as he and the others now knew that when Kalo made a threat on someone’s life he would do it and not stop until that person was dead or he was.
The two of them then went to their tents and soon fell asleep each dreaming of the other.
Meanwhile 2 lovers were looking at the night sky Zuko then said to Karata ‘I love you’ then he kissed her.
Katara then broke the kiss and said ‘I love you too Zuko’.
Darkness into light
Chapter 11 reunions and darkness spreads forth
This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic
“ Thoughts
‘ Speech
Island of korane night
Kalo was having trouble sleeping that night after all that happened he couldn’t stop thinking about her.
Her smile, her laugh everything about her made his heart melt and he left her because he didn’t want her harmed after that attempt on his life by Ka Chein’s bounty hunter’s.
He had also chosen this island as a hiding place for another reason it was close to the earth kingdom, so if he wanted to see her again he could.
Kalo had made up his mind he was going to see her again and set the record straight with her.
After deciding to go the very next day Kalo was finally able to go to sleep dreaming about her.
Fire nation royal palace
Ka Chein roared in anger as he had just discovered that Ty Lee had failed to find Kalo or the avatar but he wouldn’t kill her yet. He needed all his soldiers for the final battle and after he won he would kill the fire lord and Ty Lee and then rule over the world with his dragons.
Island of korane daybreak the next day
Kalo stepped out of his tent and he listened to the birds squawking and his men training on the beach.
Kalo then walked up to Kono and said ‘Kono I am going to leaving for the earth kingdom now, I will be gone for a few days, while I am gone I want you to train the avatar and look after the men, understood’.
Kono then replied ‘yes sir, don’t worry I will look after the men, good luck’.
Kalo then went back to his tent and took 3 cases filled with vials of blood and 3 sacks filled with gold coins and then went to the war balloon.
After he got into the balloon he then headed to the earth kingdom to find the one he loved.
After a few hours Kalo was in the southern earth kingdom he then landed in a forest and headed to a place he knew she would be.
Island of korane
After Kalo left the island the rest of the group was in shock in why Kalo left but Mai understood as in the letters he sent to her when he was in the fire nation army he spoke of a girl in the earth kingdom who he loved with all his heart often and she knew he had gone to find her and admit his feelings to her.
Southern earth kingdom
Kalo walked into the building and then saw her for the first time in many months in a fight and Kalo quickly went in to the fight to back her up.
He punched one attacker in the face and kicked another through a pillar. He saw that she was holding her own against the rest of them and Kalo always knew that every little bit helps.
He took out his sword and killed one guy and the others saw that happen then they ran out of the bar. She then turned around and saw him.
She was shocked to see him again but after the shock wore off she slapped him across the face the force of the slap caused him to stagger.
She moved to hit him again but Kalo blocked it and said ‘ I deserved that slap, but I wont let you hit me again June’.
June then said ‘what are you doing here Kalo, you on the run from the fire nation again?’.
Kalo then replied ‘no, I am here looking for you, you cant tell me you don’t remember all the good times we had together, can you June’
June looked Kalo square in the eyes and replied ‘ I remember the good times Kalo, I also remember you left me in the middle of the night, leaving only a letter with I’m sorry on it’.
Kalo took a deep breath of air and replied ‘ I did that so Ka Chein’s army wouldn’t harm you June you know that’.
June then replied ‘you could asked me how I felt Kalo, it was my choice to stay with you when they came for you, so why are you here to break my heart again?’.
Kalo then said ‘ I am here June to say this, I never stopped loving you, not for a single minute, I need to know that you still love me, and if you do you can come with me’.
Kalo then waited for the mercenary to reply and suddenly she did by kissing him on the lips.
After a few minutes they broke the kiss and June then said ‘does that answer your question Kalo, now lets get going’.
Kalo just smiled as they left the earth kingdom bar.
Fire nation fleet
Ty Lee saw the gates of azulon in the distance from the deck of her warship she only hoped that the dragon lord would forgive for Zhao’s failure on Korane.
And if he did she vowed that she would not fail again she could not fail again or it would mean death either at the hands of her enemies or at the dragon lord’s hands.
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Post by arbiter on Aug 10, 2008 9:02:38 GMT -5
well heres chapter 12 have a look at it and tell me what you think of it.
Darkness into light
Chapter 12 the board is set
This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic
“ Thoughts
‘ Speech
Southern earth kingdom
June looked at Nyla and Kalo as if reading her own mind said ‘I know some people who can look after Nyla while we are gone’.
June looked at Kalo and she said ‘who are you travelling with Kalo?’.
The half vampire looked at June nervously and he said ‘I am travelling with my old army, and the avatar and his friends, and my sister Mai’.
June then said ‘I wonder if angry boy made up with his girlfriend yet?’.
Kalo laughed after June said that and after he regained his composure he said ‘oh don’t worry June, they made up alright’.
Fire nation royal palace
Ty Lee entered the dragon lord’s throne room and she bowed before him and the dragon lord said ‘you failed to find Kalo or the avatar and his friends why!’.
Ty Lee looked up at the dragon lord and she said ‘Admiral Zhao went to search an island and he failed to return, and the men he took with him were found dead, so I headed back here instead of losing more men to an unseen enemy, please my lord Ka Chein forgive me’.
Ka Chein was silent for several minutes before he said ‘ I forgive you Ty Lee but do not fail me again, is that clear’.
Ty Lee bowed and said ‘I understand perfectly my lord Ka Chein’.
The dragon lord then said ‘good, now get out of my sight’.
Ty Lee bowed once more then left the room leaving the dragon lord alone with his thoughts.
“if Admiral Zhao failed to stop then its obvious that they have gotten more powerful, but my black flames will burn them all alive, and it will lead the way to a new world order, my order”.
Island of Korane daybreak
Zuko was meditating on the beach when he heard someone approach. He opened his golden eyes and saw the blue eyes of Katara.
Zuko then noticed the nervous look on her face and said ‘what is Katara, what’s wrong?’.
Katara then said ‘I was just wondering Zuko, I understand if you don’t want to tell me but how did you get your scar?’.
Zuko looked down as he remembered how he got the scar then looked into Katara’s eyes and said ‘3 years ago, I went to a war meeting, it was something I had wanted for awhile, but after a general suggested sacrificing a division of new recruits, I spoke out against it, as a result I had to fight an Agni Kai, I don’t know if you know what that is but -’.
Katara then interrupted by saying ‘ I do know what an Agni Kai is, Azula and Kalo explained it to me, sorry go on’.
Zuko smiled and continued by saying ‘I accepted the challenge, thinking I was going to fight the general, but I was wrong it was my father who I was to fight’.
Katara gasped at this and Zuko continued by saying ‘I refused to fight him, and that’s how I got this scar, afterwards I was banished from the fire nation, only to return if I captured the avatar’.
Katara then embraced Zuko and said ‘I am so sorry Zuko we all assumed that it was a training accident’.
Zuko then said ‘its alright Katara, now how about I gave you a massage’.
Katara smiled and said ‘alright’.
Suddenly Kono yelled ‘general Kalo returns’.
Fire nation war balloon
Kalo saw the coast and said to June ‘here we are, home sweet home’.
June laughed softly and kissed Kalo before she said ‘are you sure that avatar and his friends wont attack me Kalo?’.
Kalo wrapped his arms around June and he said ‘they wont attack you so don’t worry June’.
The war balloon then touched the ground on the island and the two of them then stepped out of the war balloon.
Sokka then said ‘what is she doing here Kalo, she once attacked us?’.
Kalo then said ‘she’s my girlfriend Sokka, that’s why she’s here’.
Toph then said in a sing song voice ‘ha ha, looks like blood sucker’s got a girlfriend’.
Kalo smiled and said ‘yes Toph I do’ he then kissed June on the lips.
Mai smiled as he saw her brother in love and truly happy for the first time in years then said ‘I see you go to admit your feelings to her Kalo, I was right’.
Kalo then said ‘yes dear sister you were right, now if you excuse us, we have some catching up to do’.
Kalo then led June to his tent to talk about what they did while they went their separate ways all those months ago.
Fire nation royal palace
The dragon lord looked out from the balcony and saw his army of seventy eight thousand men train for the invasion and thought to himself “the board is set for the final battle, a battle I will win, or I will die trying”.
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Post by arbiter on Aug 15, 2008 17:15:38 GMT -5
heres chapter 13
Darkness into light
Chapter 13 the march to war
This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic
“ Thoughts
‘ Speech
Island of korane night
Mai looked at the tide of the ocean came in crashing against the sandy shore only then did she realise that she wasn’t alone on the beach.
Aang was sitting on a nearby rock he then broke the uneasy silence by saying ‘the final battle is coming soon, and I don’t know if I am ready to face the fire lord, what if I fail?’.
Mai walked over to the young monk and said ‘you wont fail Aang, because your friends will be there to help you, I will be there to help you as well Aang’.
Aang then looked at Mai and said ‘thanks Mai’ Aang then walked back to his tent he was unable to hide the blush that emerged on his face after talking to Mai.
Fire nation royal palace
Ozai had left the war chamber confident that his defence plans correction the dragon lord’s defence plans would hold off an invasion but if it didn’t then fire lord Ozai would fight to his dying breath.
Meanwhile the dragon lord was looking over a map of the royal palace with Jet and Ty Lee ‘if the avatar defeats Ozai, and the army is surrounded, then you two will be my last line of defence, and you will not let them past you, is that clear’.
Jet and Ty Lee replied in unison ‘yes my lord’ and they then left the throne room.
Island of Korane the next day
Kalo stepped out of his tent followed closely by June and as he stepped out he was hit by the light of the sun.
Kalo then saw his army assembled on the beach Kalo walked over and said ‘men, today is the last day of training, tomorrow we head back home, but not as war heroes, this time as liberators, we have to defeat Ozai and his army, if don’t then, the fire nation, earth kingdom, and what remains of the water tribes will cease to exist, we have to stop them no matter what the cost, now I would be lying if I said this was going to be easy, Ozai’s army isn’t just going to let us stroll into the palace and kill Ozai without a fight, they’re going to try to stop us every inch of the way, they’re going to try to kill all of us before we get near Ozai, but do you know what I say to that, I say we have beaten him twice already, and I think its time we finished the job’.
Meanwhile the dragon lord Ka Chein was addressing his army from his balcony in the royal palace. ‘noble warriors of fire, for many years we have fought for this moment, for so long we fought to resurrect the dragon empire, and now we stand on the brink of the end of our struggle, but the avatar and Kalo’s army would deny us our destiny, I ask you all not as the dragon lord but as a fellow son of fire, to fight’.
Kalo then said ‘over the past few years of war, we lived and died together, we shared barracks, and we shared trenches, we shed tears and blood together, we were fighting for something for more then ourselves, something that calls out to us urging us to fight on’.
The dragon lord Ka Chein then said ‘I would not have you remember all that we have done, I would have you remember why we have done it, it was something that was within each of our hearts, something that pushes us forward assuring us of the righteous of our quest’.
Kalo then said ‘men I want you to remember what we are fighting for’.
Ka Chein then said ‘warriors remember why we fight, we fight for the dragons!’.
Kalo then finished his speech by saying ‘we fight for life itself, freedom and peace, for all time’
Kono then yelled ‘all right men start running 6 hundred laps around the island, now!’.
Kalo then thought to himself “so it begins, the march to war”.
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Post by arbiter on Aug 20, 2008 5:28:03 GMT -5
heres chapter 14 of darkness into light
Darkness into light
Chapter 14 the last night before war and the battle begins
‘ speech
“ thoughts
Island of korane night
In Kalo’s tent on his bed general Kalo wrapped his arms around June and said to her softly ‘tomorrow, we march to war, and I just want you to know I love you with all my heart’.
June then kissed Kalo and wrapped her arms around him. The bounty hunter then said ‘I love you too Kalo, and after we win, we will go to the north pole and help get you cured of your curse’.
Kalo then said ‘and after I am cured of my curse June, I want to know 1 thing, will you marry me?’
June kissed the half vampire again on the lips and she said ‘does that answer your question Kalo’.
Kalo replied ‘yes June that does answer my question’.
The half vampire and his bounty hunter celebrated their love long into the night.
Meanwhile on the other side of the encampment Zuko and Katara were both wondering what would happen if they won while they both knew what would happen if they lost against the dragon lord and his armies.
Zuko said ‘if we win against my father and Ka Chein, I will most likely become fire lord, but Katara I would like if you stood by my side as the fire lady’.
Katara looked shocked before she replied ‘I will but what will the nobles think?’.
Zuko said ‘dang what the nobles think Katara!, if I want you as my fire lady, they will just have to live with it, but I want to know if you want to marry me?’.
Katara replied ‘of course I want to marry you Zuko’.
Zuko then kissed Katara on the lips and said ‘you have no idea how happy you have made me Katara’.
The water bender laughed and said ‘I think I do Zuko’.
Fire nation royal palace
The dragon lord looked at his top generals, Ozai, Ty Lee and Jet as they were seated at the table discussing their plans for after Sozins comet returned.
General Wong looked at the map of the world and said ‘and after we have crushed the Earth Kingdom rebellions, we will send all our forces to the northern water tribe and finish them off once and for all’.
Ka Chein then said ‘and what about the southern water tribe?, what do you plan to do about them general Wong?’.
The general then replied ‘the southern tribe has less then 50 people there, all we have to do is wait a few years and their tribe will die out’.
Ka Chein then yelled ‘and until they die out the southern tribe will continue to resist us!, I want general Zuu to send his army to the south pole and kill every last person there, is that clear General Wong?’.
General Wong bowed his head low and replied ‘yes my lord Ka Chein’.
The dragon lord then said ‘this battle will make us strong, or make us weak, we must not fail, or everything we have strived for these past 100 years will have been in vain’.
Ozai then said ‘we will not fail you Ka Chein, we will fight to the last man against the avatar and Kalo’.
Ka Chein then said ‘but Admiral Zhao betrayed us and told Kalo, our plans for the day Sozins comet returns, now is not the time for disloyalty in our leadership, if any general here has a issue in the army they would like to raise, the floor is yours’.
No one spoke and Ka Chein continued by saying ‘general Qun, please leave through the door behind you’.
After Qun left Ka Chein then said ‘I demand absolutely loyalty from all of you’.
General Wong then said ‘my lord, I believe I speak for every general here when I say, you have our undying loyalty and support’.
Everyone at the table then banged their hands on the table to show their loyalty to the dragon lord who smiled at this show of loyalty.
Island of korane daybreak
Kalo oversaw his men getting on their warships and he then did a count he had 8 warships, 2 airships and 2 war balloons, along with 61 thousand men their attack would succeed it had to or else there would be nothing left in a few days nothing except Ka Chein and his dragons.
Kalo then went over with Kono to discuss the battle plan with Aang and his friends.
Kalo pointed to the gates of Azulon and said ‘our ships will pass through the gates undetected, then our air ships will draw the enemies fire, allowing our forces to land and fight their way up to the tower, then we split up, me, Zuko, Katara, Mai and Azula will go after Ka Chein, while Aang you, Toph, Iroh, Sokka and Suki will go after Ozai, Ty Lee and Jet, once they are dead or captured the generals will quickly give up, and the war will be over, now lets go do this thing’.
so what do you think good or bad let me know?.
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Post by arbiter on Aug 25, 2008 16:23:14 GMT -5
heres the final two chapters of darkness into light
Darkness into light
Chapter 15 the final battle part 1 This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic.
“ thoughts
‘ speech
Kalo’s Fire nation fleet near the gates of Azulon
Kalo entered the mess hall hand in hand with June when he did he saw that Kono, Aang, Mai and Azula were already there waiting for them.
Kalo and June then sat down and waited for the others they didn’t have to wait long as Sokka and Suki entered followed by Zuko and Katara.
After everyone sat down and started eating until Sokka broke the silence by saying ‘so Kalo tell me, how did you and June get together anyway?’.
Kalo then looked at Sokka and said ‘I ran into her in the earth kingdom after I emerged from my self imposed exile, it was love at first sight’.
Sokka then said nothing more and he resumed eating.
Suddenly the room shook then a soldier came in and said ‘general Kalo, we are under attack’.
Kalo then stood up and said ‘order our fleet to fire back, so much for the element of surprise’.
Kalo and Kono then went up to the bridge and saw that they were being attacked by 20 fire nation ships.
Kalo knew they were outnumbered but suddenly he saw 11 of the enemy ships explode he looked up and saw an amazing site 10 fire nation air ships were firing on the enemy and clearing a path for them to enter the docks.
Kalo then said to Kono ‘tell our fleet to head straight for the docks, those airships are on our side’.
Kono then said ‘yes sir, we are only 3 minutes away from the docks, this will be easy’.
Kalo then said ‘remember Kono, our enemy could be setting up a trap, like they did for the invaders on the DOBS’.
Kono then left the bridge to get the men ready for battle.
Kalo then looked ahead and the docks in his view with the palace city just behind it in the distance.
Meanwhile in the royal palace the dragon lord Ka Chein was furious at what had happened general Wong had allowed Kalo and his army to head to the docks and he had joined their side in the conflict against him.
Ka Chein looked at Ozai and said ‘general Wong has betrayed us all and he will pay, now I want all our forces to be gathered around the tower at the docks, while I gather the warriors around the palace to prepare for a final stand’.
Ozai bowed his head and replied ‘it will be done, my lord Ka Chein’.
Fire nation city palace docks
Kalo and his army had landed on the docks and met little opposition, but Kalo knew the dragon lord had gathered his armies to hold them of all the dragon lord needed was time because Sozin’s comet was to return to earth in only 1 hour and the sky was already starting to change to a dark red colour.
Kono then ran up to Kalo and said ‘the docks are ours general Kalo, we are awaiting your orders before we advance?’.
Kalo looked at his second in command and said ‘I want our men, to keep moving, and to not stop until fire lord Ozai is dead, is that clear colonel Kono’.
Kono looked shocked for a few moments until the realisation of his new promotion sank in and he replied ‘yes sir’.
Kalo smiled and said ‘alright its time to split up, Zuko Katara, Mai, Azula, lets get moving’.
His sister looked at him and she then said to Aang ‘good luck Aang’.
The young monk then said ‘thanks, good luck to you too Mai’. The two of them then hugged each other but Kalo noticed the blush on their faces.
Kalo and his team then got onto an airship and headed to the royal palace while Aang and others continued to fight their way up to the palace.
Kono then yelled to his ’keep up the pressure men!, we are breaking through their defence lines!’.
Suddenly several enemy soldiers fell to ground after being hit with a fire blast Kono then turned around and saw Admiral Zhao walking up to them and the admiral said to Kono ’I couldn’t let Kalo, have all the fun, could I?’.
Kono then said ‘glad your with us Zhao, now we have a battle to win’.
Kalo looked at the palace from the bridge of the airship and said ‘this is it, lets take down the dragon lord Ka Chein’.
Meanwhile Aang and Toph looked on in shock as they saw who had arrived on the battlefield as did every soldier on both sides.
It was fire lord Ozai himself along with Ty Lee and Jet.
The fire lord then said ‘well well, avatar Aang, are you going to try to kill me or not?’.
Aang then attacked the fire lord while the dragon lord stood on the top of the royal palace he raised his arms into the air and yelled out ‘it has begun!, Sozin’s comet has returned!’.
As he said that several dark shapes appeared and began to emerge from the red sky. The dragon lord then noticed an airship heading towards him and he slipped into a bending stance and prepared himself for battle against Kalo and his allies.
Darkness into light
Chapter 16 the final battle part 2
This is set after the boiling rock so there will some spoilers in this fanfic.
“ thoughts
‘ speech
Fire nation docks
Ozai dodged Aang’s attack and said ‘is that the best you can do avatar, I thought my weak children thought you better then that’.
Aang then shouted at Ozai ‘they are not weak Ozai!, the only weak person here is you!’. Aang finished the sentence by launching 2 fire blasts at Ozai.
The fire lord laughed and said ‘well then let us see who is better avatar Aang, you or me fire lord Ozai’.
As the two of them began to fight Sokka had already taken out Jet and was now helping Suki and Iroh take out Ty Lee.
But she was proving to be difficult as she kept shooting lighting at Suki which being redirected by Iroh making sure not one of them could get close enough to fight her in hand to hand combat.
Suddenly the acrobat’s legs were sank into the earth by Toph stopping her from producing lighting and with one quick punch from Suki Ty Lee was out cold.
They then turned to watch the fight that was going on between Aang and the fire lord which so far an even fight.
Fire nation royal palace
Ka Chein waited on top on the palace for his enemies to arrive and when the airship was close enough the dragon lord destroyed it with his black flames but he knew Kalo and his allies survived.
Suddenly a fire blast missed Ka Chein’s head by mere inches and then he saw them Kalo, his sister Mai, Ozai’s children Zuko and Azula and Zuko’s love Katara.
Ka Chein then said ‘you know Kalo, I am impressed with your idea of using the airship as a decoy, how about the five of you swear an oath of loyalty to me, and we can forgo this conflict’.
Kalo then replied ‘actually Ka Chein, what I was thinking was, we could kick your Equus asinus, then stuff your body in an airship and fertilise the land with you’.
Ka Chein then said ‘you have Ra Chan’s sense of humour, I hope you die quicker that weak pathetic man did’.
Kalo then said ‘he wasn’t pathetic Ka Chein, you are’.
Ka Chein now enraged launched a fire ball at Kalo and said ‘enough talk Kalo, lets fight’.
Kalo then fired a barrage of fire balls at Ka Chein who dodged it and said ‘come on Kalo, I know you can do better then that’.
Suddenly Azula and Zuko launched fire balls at Ka Chein while Mai threw her daggers and Katara launched a water whip.
Ka Chein avoided the attacks and fired a fire snake at Zuko and Kalo knocking them to the ground he then said to the others ‘I wont kill any of you 3, after all I could use a few concubines for those long nights as dragon lord’.
The three women now absolutely furious launched a barrage of attacks forcing the dragon lord back.
But the dragon lord then looked at Kalo who had now gotten back up on his feet along with Zuko and said ‘you cant kill me Kalo, none of you can, you don’t have the power’.
Suddenly Kalo noticed a familiar spirit appeared from the sky and the spirit said to the dragon lord ‘but Ka Chein, I do have the power to kill you’. as the spirit came closer to the royal palace Katara and the otheres as it was the moon spirit Yue herself.
Ka Chein turned to face her he then laughed and said ‘you cant kill me either Yue’.
Yue then said ‘I can fight you Ka Chein, you know that’.
Ka Chein then with a voice of arrogance said ‘yes, but you cant win Yue’.
Yue smirked and said ‘it doesn’t matter weather or not I kill you Ka Chein, because you wont be able to do anything, but fight me back’.
Ka Chein looked her straight in the eyes and said ‘yeah, well what are you going to do Yue?’.
She then said ‘something the others should have done to you a long time ago Ka Chein’.
She then charged at the dragon lord forcing his spirit out his body and dragging it into the gates of Agni along with his body.
The group then looked at the sky and saw the dark shapes disappear from the sky.
Kalo then said ‘that’s it, its over’.
Suddenly there was a great rumbling sound and the roof of the royal palace exploded and Ka Chein emerged from the hole in the roof and yelled ‘this is my world Kalo, my world!’.
The group then ducked Ka Chein’s fire blasts and retaliated with their own attacks.
Katara then yelled ‘I thought you said, that was going to kill him’.
Before Kalo could reply Ka Chein launched another fire ball forcing Kalo onto the ground and Ka Chein then stood over him prepared to kill him in an instant.
Kalo then redrew his knife and plunged it through the dragon lord’s heart and from the wound blood came out.
Kalo then said in answer to Katara’s question ‘he’s mortal’.
Ka Chein was now on the floor coughing and trying to cover the wound with his hands.
Ka Chein then looked Kalo straight in the eye and said several words in a mysterious dialect before his eyes closed forever.
Mai then turned to her older brother and said ‘Kalo, what did he say?’.
Kalo looked at the red sky and said ‘death is only an open window, I will return again for revenge’.
The five of them then climbed down the palace through the hole in the roof to help Aang finish Ozai.
Fire nation docks
Aang launched several more fire blasts at Ozai and then noticed he was on the ground in pain and then suddenly the fire lord burst into flames much to the shock of everyone on the docks especially Iroh and Zhao.
Suddenly Aang noticed Kalo and the others running up towards them.
Kalo took a single look at the body and said ‘fire lord Ozai is now dead, the avatar as won, I order every single solder here under Ozai’s command to surrender now, and you can return to your families as men, instead of killers’.
After Kalo finished talking half the soldiers raised their arms in surrender Kalo then said to Kono and Zhao take them to the tower, and imprison them, and release all the war criminals from the DOBS who are in there while your at it’.
After all the soldiers and POWs were gone Kalo hugged June and they all noticed that Yue was back.
She then said ‘Kalo, you defeated a terrible evil, that would have destroyed the world, and because of that the spirits have decided to give you this’.
Yue then grabbed Kalo and forced a white liquid from a crystal vial down his throat after he was released he realised something, that liquid had cured him Kalo was no longer a vampire he was finally free.
He then said only three words ‘thank you Yue’.
Yue only nodded and before anyone else could say anything she was gone.
Epilogue 4 years later
It was a sunny day on ember island as Kalo walked hand in hand June with their wedding rings glistening in the sunlight.
Kalo looked at the sun and the surrounding area and said ‘it’s a beautiful sight, but not as beautiful as you June’.
June then replied by kissing her husband on the lips while keeping on eye on their 3 year old son Shano who was being watched Toph.
A few days after the war ended Toph got a reply to the letter she sent to her parents saying if she didn’t return home the bounty on her would be increased 4 times what it already was.
As soon as Kalo heard what happened he had gone to Toph with an idea he would go to Ba Sing Se and get Toph’s parent’s to give up custody so Kalo could legally adopt Toph, needless to say she loved Kalo’s plan.
As for the other’s a few days after the war ended Zuko was crowned fire lord and he married Katara on her birthday and after a year Katara announced that she was pregnant a few months later she had a baby girl who them named Kya in honour of Katara's mother.
As for Mai and Aang it took them 4 months to admit their feelings for one another and after 3 years of dating Aang proposed to her and their wedding was in a few months.
As for Sokka he and Suki settled down on Kyoshi island and were expecting their first child any day now.
As for Azula and Iroh they went to Ba Sing Se to run his teashop and help the rest of the world understand that Azula had redeemed herself.
After the war ended Zuko had rearranged the army appointing a military council to help him run the army Kalo, Zhao, Kono and Wong were the only members of the council.
The only bad thing was several groups of earth kingdom soldiers who kept attacking Fire nation ships trying to restart the war.
Kalo held June in his arms and as they watched the sunrise Kalo thought to himself “we did it, we turned darkness into light”.
so what do you think?.
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