Kanasha- Water Tribe

[Kana]

Name: Kanasha
Age: 13
Gender: female
Nation: Water Tribes(Northern)
Bender?:Yes (water
Appearance: KAnasha has long, brown hair, which she wears in the traditional form She has agua-marine eyes. She is about 5ft3. She wears a perple dress thing, like Katara's.
Personality: She is very secretive, not revealing much of herself to anyone. She hates the predijuce againts women in her tribe. If she ever does show her emotions, she is usually cheerful and confidant.
History: Ever since she discovered her water abilities, she trained as a healer, wanted to fight.but she never wanted to be a healer, she had dreams of becoming a fighter. She knew she had no chance of training under a master, so she secretly spied on the masters, and then trained by herself, now she is a skilled waterbender. She had dreams of becoming a master bender, so she hoopes to find a way to the southern tribe, to train under one of the masters there.

[Zukosfire5]

Alright, so before I begin, let me say that you need to bold and underline only the catagories, and not the description.

Appearance: You need to go into more detail on this. You say she has long brown hair that she wears in the traditional form. What's the traditional form? You need to be much more descriptive. And when you describe her outfit, you can't just say it's like Katara's and leave it at that. You need to actually describe it, i.e. how long it is, what color it is, etc. Also, purple isn't a color worn by the Water Tribes. They wear mostly blue, so please put some more blue in your outfit.

Personality: Once again, you need to be much more descriptive. What makes her tick? What happens when she's mad? You say she hates the prejudice in her tribe, but what does she do about that? Speak out? Say nothing? You need to add more description before this is approved.

History: Once again, this has to be more descriptive. Start with her birth, then work your way to the present. Also if she grew up in the Northern Tribe, she most likely wouldn't think that there was a prejudice against women. She would just accept it as tradition. Remember, Katara seemed to be the first one who had a problem with it. And if she spied on the masters and trained herself, I doubt she would be a skilled Waterbender by age 13. And once again, I doubt that she would be someone who would break the rules of her culture, and want to become a master bender.

Until this is revised, it's not accepted.