Post by The Crystal [Hope] Catacombs on Nov 24, 2007 13:54:05 GMT -5
Hey, everybody! Thank you for being patient with me for so long. I hope you all aren't too mad at me. I knew the third season would screw up my writing. But I have finally finished the latest chapter of Power Hungry! *clap* Remember, I try to karma all comments. Also check out my drabbles that will be popping up around the site. I love you guys!
"See?" I boasted. "I told you we could trust her!"
Katara looked disappointed, but she grinned weakly. "I guess you were right. I let my prejudices against the Fire Nation get the better of me, and I was wrong. I know better." I beamed at her.
"This is so great! Now we can all be friends!" I said happily. "Katara, I bet you and Zuko could get along if you tried, and Mai has your sense of humor, Toph, and Sokka..." I trailed off as the three of them exchanged glances. "What?"
"Who said we were going to be friends with them?" Toph asked rhetorically.
"Yeah. I may trust Azula now, but I'm not going to be her friend," Katara said.
"But I thought..."
"Well, I guess you thought wrong, Twinkletoes," Toph cut me off.
"Look, Aang. I'm not saying that they aren't trustworthy. I'm sure they are. And they seem like talented fighters, and intelligent and..."
"Don't forget beautiful!" Sokka added. Katara arched her eyebrows in annoyance. "What? Those girls are hot!"
"Anyway. The reailty is, I just don't like them. I think they're rude and malicious and sneaky. Especially Zuko. And I am not going to be friends with them," she concluded.
"But Katara!" I insisted, whining a bit.
"Hey, can we not do this right now? I don't want to argue anymore," she sighed. I nodded. "Let's do some waterbending. We haven't practiced in almost two days."
"Okay," I gave in quietly. I turned to Sokka and Toph. "Do you guys wanna come watch?"
"Well, I don't know. There's not much to see," Toph reminded me sarcastically. "But I'll come along. It's not like there's anything else to do."
"Do you think the Earth King kept a metal sharpener around here? I want to sharpen my boomerang," Sokka asked, fondling the dull boomerang.
"No, I don't think that the King of all Ba Sing Se had anything better to do than sharpen metal! Never!" Toph joked. Sokka's face fell.
"Oh, come on. Give it here. I'll sharpen it for you," she said, snatching it out of his hands. She pressed the metal between her fingers roughly, gliding them along the edges of the boomerang. She handed it back to him. He gingerly tapped one of the corners, then flung it across the room. It cut cleanly through Katara's curtains before turning around and landing gracefully in Sokka's hand.
"Yay! Great job!" he exclaimed, hugging both Toph and the weapon tightly.
"Uh, maybe we should get out of here... before Sokka decides to throw that thing again and gives me a haircut," Katara suggested, turning and walking out of the room. I followed reluctantly.
The air by the pond in the courtyard was warm, relaxing thanks to the heat of the midday sun. a few Dai Li agents lingered around, making the rounds and ensuring that the palace was secure. Their prescence both calmed and unnerved me. I took a deep breath and stripped off my clothes, then waded into the water. It was cold, and armadillo-goosebumps sprinkled themselves across my skin. I began to work through my warm ups.
I moved a stream of water around smoothly, going through my stances. Katara moved along beside me. Up, across, around, down, up again, and out. A few minutes later, Toph stomped into the courtyard, a corner of her tunic missing.
"Boomerang?" I guessed.
"Of course," she snorted. I laughed. "Please," she said, motioning, "continue your swimming lesson."
"Toph, this is..." Katara began to lecture.
"I know, I know, it's waterbending, which is just as important as earthbending. I get it. So get on with it," Toph cut in. Katara rolled her eyes, but turned back to me.
"Okay, Aang. Remember that last move I taught you?"
"The Fishes' Tail?" I recalled.
"That's the one. Show it to me," she coached. I did as she asked, breaking a thicket of reeds by bendimg the water against each side, hammering the stalks with swerving waves. The overall effect did look rather fish-like.
"That's good, but your timing is off. The time between the waves is too long. Go just a little bit faster," she instrucyed, demonstrating it to me. I followed suit, hearing the satisfying snap of the tender green stalks. I grinned at her. "Excellent," she complimented me.
We practiced some more, sometimes including Toph for some earth/water crossover lessons. By the end of the session, I was sweaty and breathless.
"Okay, I think we're all set for today," Katara said, sounding as exhausted as I felt. I wiped a few beads of sweat off my brow.
"Sounds good to me."
"I'm gonna cool down. You?" she asked.
"No, I think I'll just head back to my room," I told her, the bitter aftertaste of the day's earlier conflicts rising up in my mouth yet again.
"Do you need a healing session? Maybe I pushed you too hard today. I'll be right..."
"Katara, I'm fine," I insisted, annoyed. Her face broke a little, but I simply walked away. I gathered up my clothes into a ball, too overheated to put them back on.
The palace hallway was nice and cool, the stone floors soothingly cold against my bare feet. It was an enormous place. I wondered how many different ways there were to get back to my room as I aimlessly wandered the wide corridors.
After a while, I reached a very long hall. There was a room with an open doorway, light flickering from inside. I could hear angry voices.
"That is not the point, Zuko. The point is that I'm the only one around here with the power to do as I please. When I give an order, you need to obey it!" I heard Azula snap.
"You're not the boss of me!" Zuko shouted. I heard something crash inside.
"You can't beat me, Zuzu. I am everything you're not. Next time, listen to that voice in your head that tells you not to mess with your little sister." Her footsteps became loud. She exited the room and caught me staring.
We eyed each other for a moment, stunned. Her eyes were wide and her full lips hung open slightly.
"Sorry. I didn't mean to eavesdrop," I apologized. She regained her composture, but still seemed uncomfortable, averting her eyes away from me.
"I... I really should go," she said, covering her eyes and skaking her head. I watched her go, puzzled.
Zuko poked his head out of the doorway to see who his sister had been talking to. "Ugh," he scoffed when he saw me. "Put some clothes on!" He slammed the door shut.
I glanced down at myself, my face flushing as I realized I had just spoken to royalty while in my underwear. It was okay around my friends, but perhaps Katara was right; these Fire Nation kids weren't my friends. Not yet, anyway.
I slapped a palm against my forehead. How could I have been so stupid? Nothing was turning out in my favor lately.
Credit: Zuko 1 by RP, Zuko 2 by Konoko14. Keeper of Toph's chest and Mai's grey aura.
Post by Sazzy-Luff <3 on Dec 9, 2007 1:02:13 GMT -5
Very nice. I've read everything up to date, and aside from a few spelling and grammatical errors, it's abosolutely amazing! I really do like it.
However, the last chapter may be long, but I think that the whole "we should trust her" to "something's a bit suspicious" seems to move a bit too fast. There's a whole league of dialogue between Azula and Zuko that is missing.
I'd suggest that in the next chapter (Azula POV) that you take a bit of a step back in time and elaborate on Azula's thoughts and actions after the Truth Challenge, and definately add more onto that convo between her and Zuko. Then end the chapter with her noticing Aang eavesdropping on her and what's going through her head.
Post by ReelTrebleMaker on Dec 15, 2007 9:07:50 GMT -5
Whee! This is an awesome chapter! THANK YOU so muchy for posting! (I haven't been on in a while... School is evil.)
I can tell that all of the characters are acting right to their personalities; they are not deviating from the way they act in the series. However, Azula's personality is hazy whenever the story is in Aang's POV. I know she's probably acting, but I like how you make so that HE can't tell that.
Through the drama and character clashes, I still think this fic is cute I've finally read it all, I usually don't read 1st person POV fics, but I like this one alot and so I'll continue reading it :3 You do a good job of moving the story with Aang's thoughts and what he says.
I love the Azulaang moments, even though I'm a die-hard sokkla shipper~
The only thing this chapter was missing was, as sazzy-luff said, more Azula dialogue ._. but other than that it's been pretty cool~ continue, plz?
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