Time Bandit
Meng
There is no war within the walls!
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Post by Time Bandit on Nov 14, 2006 13:29:21 GMT -5
thanks u guys ill try to use most of your segestions as i said once befor in the real world (not on the computer) my grammer is preety good, my typing is slow and i tend not to notice wrong things in my writing/typing. by the way thanks agian
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lexlex
Haru
^^one of my oc's^^
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Post by lexlex on Nov 29, 2006 19:11:49 GMT -5
you had alot of tyypos and grammar mistakes...i liked it tho
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lexlex
Haru
^^one of my oc's^^
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Post by lexlex on Nov 29, 2006 19:12:19 GMT -5
o and how is this zutara?
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Time Bandit
Meng
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Post by Time Bandit on Nov 30, 2006 16:35:23 GMT -5
i havent finished it yet but i dont think i should continue and just delete it
Should i?? I was going to put in the Zutara bit later. should i continue]. Ive made a better one. Avaspazums has read it although its not finished. Its called: My first OC fanfic.
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lexlex
Haru
^^one of my oc's^^
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Post by lexlex on Dec 3, 2006 19:40:29 GMT -5
i think u should keep going
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Time Bandit
Meng
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Post by Time Bandit on Dec 27, 2006 17:41:00 GMT -5
kk I'll try and make it better soon ive just been abit bizy you know with all da christmas things like seeing reletives all that stuff so i haven't been abel to update it latly
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Post by watergirl on Jan 15, 2007 15:37:47 GMT -5
O.k. I've read only the first three chap. and I got to say I'm not impressed with your grammer and spelling either. I't's like all those guys said you need to keep a dictionary and therauosu with you when you write stories. That way you can give more variety to what you're saying. Especially on the he said she said part that says who said what. There are other words to used like she/he mentioned, exclaimed, shouted(if they are angry). Another thing is that you said that off the computer you are really good with spelling and grammer. So why aren't you like that when writing fanfics? After all making fanfics or anytypes of stories involve grammer and spelling. I should know si'm a writer too. I haven't wrote a fanfic yet because I have know idea how to giet it on the computer and I haven't came up with an idea yet anyways.
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Time Bandit
Meng
There is no war within the walls!
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Post by Time Bandit on Feb 7, 2007 6:21:26 GMT -5
Sorry My grammer is better in real life and it is getting better typing wise. If you read my new fanfic Seeing Sokka its not finished but I thought it was good I'm going to delete this fanfic seeing as no one likes it I'm deleting it tomorrow
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Post by waterfire (I am back!!!) on Feb 11, 2007 14:30:35 GMT -5
I love it! I'll give you karma!
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Time Bandit
Meng
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Post by Time Bandit on Feb 11, 2007 18:43:58 GMT -5
k I wont delete it, mostly because I dont know how and I want to put in the ending
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Time Bandit
Meng
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Post by Time Bandit on Feb 11, 2007 18:55:58 GMT -5
This is the update, I hope its better. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The next day went past in a flash, mostly lounging about and doing nothing, excited about the next couple of days. " I hate snow." Toph shouted as she trudged into the market place of Ba sing se which was decorated with sparkley lights and the blanket of snow, still falling. " Get over it Toph, I've lived in snow for fourteen years and you don't hear me complaining" Katara said " I just did" Toph retorted. They were having an argument again, as pur usual. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- All for the moment, me have to come off the computer now.
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