hwangsta
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Post by hwangsta on May 8, 2006 0:59:28 GMT -5
IT'S THE MARY SUE MONSTER!!! nice fic.put it on fanfiction.com people will give you tons of reviews, and i need hlep wrting monster sues please give me some pointers
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Horyo
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Post by Horyo on May 8, 2006 1:26:46 GMT -5
okie!
1 They're perfect, personality, ppowers, strength, the whole package. OH and looks. 2. They get to fall in love with...well basically any canon, and the canon goes OOC. (In this case Zuko see how I make him scared? thats OOCness, or how I make him like that creepy sue? Thats also OOCness) 3. They're godly, they have godlike powers, (ie multibeding, or ____bending) 4. They usually have a destroyed past. (Overused...) 5. They're swept away by some greater destiny than the Avatar and becomes better than the Avatar. 6. They can defeat the avatar. 7. They're smarter than everyone else. 8. In some conflict they're always the ones who find the cure or answer to everything (I swear can't it just be the normal guy???)
And I think thats all, if I know anymore I'll add. Bascially...
Mary Sue=Crappy story.
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Post by Youkai-Slayer on May 8, 2006 11:04:40 GMT -5
I just noticed this. It's hysterical. I remembered participating in a Mary Sue fic creation before where we actually attempted to write the worst fic ever but this one I like more cause the characters realize that the Mary Sue character is a thing of evil. Poor Zuko. Luckily Katara is there to help. Oh, Horyo it is OOC (out of character). OC is original character which signals to anyone reading a story that a possibly Mary Sue or Gary Stu lies within the fic. I've been sporking these sorts of fics on AvatarSues Live Journal now and all those are indeed traits of the Sues. I would add this when it comes to the effects of OOC based on the pairing: If the Sue is in love with Zuko then Iroh will act super sweet and nice to her and practically goad Zuko into liking her If the Sue is in love with Sokka, Katara and Aang will immediately become her bestest friends and she will kick Zuko's butt in a fight before you can say Agni Kai. If the Sue is in love with Aang, Katara will become a jealous monster and Sokka will just sit around acting stupid and hungry
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Post by Horyo on May 8, 2006 18:20:53 GMT -5
OMFG!!! I WAS TYPING SOMETHING AND THEN I PUSHED TAB+Back space, ahhh I lost my latest edition. But I'll try to have it back up later tonight, its gonnna be super hilarrious and those of you who want to say "I'm in"
EDIT: Anyways I finally have time to write!!!
Everyone stood in horror as Mary showed her true form, her black hairy legs stretched acorss the ship, dripping black oily substances. On her face a yellow drool started to drip from her mouth, slowly and stickily it hung in the air and splashed on the ground. "ITs...hideous!" Katara shouted. "NO...I'm beautiful!" Sue gurgeld through her mouth of digusting saliva. She outstretched one of her spirder-like arms and grabbed Katara around the waist. SHe screamed loudly. "Katara! Let her go you monser!" Yelled both Aang and Sokka. "Awww Aangy poo...and So-Kuta! You're not mad at me are you? Well we'll fix that..." She said dropping Katara and trying to hypnotize Aang and Sokka. Aang leapt into the air and struck her with wind. "AHahahaahahahahahaha, that breeze is so relaxing! Well let me show you my gift, the Wind Scar!" Mary laughed out. "The whaaa--??" Everyone yelled. SOon Mary's hands were glowing, and her spider like tentacles combined into a great sword, but everything stopped. "Huh? WHeres my Hand-Saega?" Mary gasped. "Halt sue!" Said ominious voices from above. Then the Four symbols of the Nations appeared as several people rained form the sky, they all had futuristic (our modern day) clothing, and a small pencil, some of them, a strange device which folded up, it had a glowing screen and several small doohickeys (buttons, basically a laptop). Most noticable about these people were the letters "DH" on their shirts. "Stop evil Sue prepare to be MISTed! Shouted some, and they all started writing sarcastic words, which flew to Mary and deformed her in many ways possible, and altering her actions. Mary was melting into a giant sludgy ink, she screamed but the ink just slid off the ship. "Alright, once again the Anti-Sues from the Distant Horizon win!" They shouted in excitement. "Uhh...whoare you people?" Asked Zuko, still shocked. "AHHHHH OH MY GOSH!!! ITS ZUKOOOOOO!!!" Screamed some girls who started foaming at the mouth. The leader sighed and said, "lets bring them back..." But little known to anyone, the ink in the sea started to drift, towards an island where other "Perfections" were, they were plotting something...Against Distant Horizons... Welcome to the universe of Mary Sues. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ SO how did you guys like my intro? Its gonna be a fun season Anti Sues get your fingers/pencils ready...
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Angel Eyes
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Post by Angel Eyes on May 9, 2006 6:14:30 GMT -5
And therein starts The League of Anti-Mary Sues (LAMS). XD
Actually, I had an idea of writing a Mary-Sue fic, but then i read yours and it was so much better. *sighs* Well, back to the drawing board. By the way, you wouldn't mind if I write a Mary-Sue fic, would you?
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Post by Horyo on May 9, 2006 14:42:09 GMT -5
Of course not, this is just for fun and all, use anything you want from the story. Anyone, I just did this for entertainment.
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firebenderjess
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Post by firebenderjess on May 9, 2006 16:44:34 GMT -5
oooh! evil mary-sue island! call the afc editors! (is one)
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Post by Horyo on May 9, 2006 21:50:19 GMT -5
ANNOUNCMENT TO DISTANT HORIZON! THERE WILL BE A SERIES OF SUES ON THE LOOSE, WE MUST EXTERMINATE THEM! Most well known Sues. Mary Sue: Tried to steal Zuko, and Aang and Sokka all in one chapter, she is actually a hideous eight legged spider freak. Gary Stu: Tried to steal Yue, Katara, Meng ( ) and other girls. In truth he is a giant rat, iwth a sticky slimy tail. Fairee Bendalot : SOme muscular, all powerful guy who knows how to bend time dimension, black holes, faces, tongues, sight, smell, mind, soul, light, dark etc...Yet he doesn't know the four elements ;; Azula's clone: Was created when Azula was born, the creators thought that she was a blotch so they redid it and wiped her out. She escaped to Mary-Sue Island, and learned how to bend lightning fire, and is followed by Rei, and Rocki Lee. Rei: So happy upbeat girl who makes everyone else happy, there was a series of events where Aang and co. kept getting into disasters, disastters which she saved them from. Her hair is pink and she knows how to fight with needles. She once trapped Sokka in an...adult...fic...*SHUDDERS OMG THE IMAGES!!!* Rocki Lee: Super loud and flirtatious girl who "marries" Zuko, enslaving him and forcing him to scrub her feet every day and night, yet Zuko is happy. The Author says that "Rocki Lee had 2 big@ss melons on her chest" We have currently in possession Rocki Lee. (Btw these were real Sues by REAL authors...(OMG NICK!!!!) Rocki Lee sat in the papery confinements of her shell. A DH guard, walked through viewing all the trolls and sues, and then walked away. "Hey there cutie-pie!" Rocki Lee called out towards teh guard, he came back and said clearly. "Foolish Sue, your powers are ineffective to me, you're WEAK!" He yelled into the cell. "Aww...but you're just so big and strong...and handsome...why don't you let me out so we could have some... fun" She said with a certain tone. "W-what kind of fun you disgusting worm!" Yhe Guard Yelled. "I was only talking about playing Airball SHEESH!" She said gripping the paper like bars of the jail cell. Her hands were starting to melt, then she found her way out. "Hey guard! You know what? I think your forum and all yoru staff memebers are STUPID!" She scraemed. The guard took out his pencil and jabbed the sue, saying "If we're so stupid why are you the one in the jail cell? AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA!" He laughed, as he MISTed her. "AHHHH YOU'RE HURTING ME!!!" She yelled, then grabbed his pencil adn quickly cut the paper bars with the sharp end. After she was released, Rocki used a dimension portal and threw the guard inside it. Laughing she left the Trash Bin, and headed for...the General Avatar Board...What dangers will she cause? Can you help DH's LAM-S to stop her? Definition. MISTing: TO counter anything about a Mary Sue, with smart sarcasm and humorous jabs.
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Youkai-Slayer
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Post by Youkai-Slayer on May 9, 2006 23:01:48 GMT -5
Someone seriously wrote Rocki Lee?!?!
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Post by Horyo on May 9, 2006 23:47:55 GMT -5
Yes quiet sadly...her description...
Circular buggy eyes, with large eyelashes, green spandex and a super good figher who kicked the crud out of Sokka.
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Post by Alleluia on May 10, 2006 12:59:48 GMT -5
Why on earth would someone write "Rocki Lee"? I like his character, but if you are gonna rip off Naruto at least don't butcher him and just make it a crossover, instead... -_-'
I am of the belief that if the words "no-jutsu" are anywhere within a forty mile radius of an OC or an A:tLA story, the abomination should be nuked. Talk to me about it when "jutsu" is actually at least implied in canon and maybe I'll reconsider. [/rant]
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Post by Horyo on May 10, 2006 15:10:58 GMT -5
Are you yelling at me?? @_@ (Puppy dog eyes) X)
Anyways I agree, but I'm making mary sues, and I just remember that (AWFUL OH MY GOSH!) Fanfiction, where there was even worse stuff...
Rocki Lee. (Rock Lee/Ty Lee) Kagaara (Gaara/Katara). And Sakatara (Sakura/KATARA) Sasukka (Sasuke/Sokka) Ozarimaru (Ozai/Orochimaru) Avatar Karoku (Kakashi/Roku) Avatar Hioyshi (Hinata/Kyoshi) Oh and Naruko (Naruto/Zuko) JIrayoh (Jiraya/Iroh) And it was all in one story....AWFUL! The pairings...It was awful, I wrote these names so I'd make fun of it later on ;D
And in the end, it was...something like OZariumaru marries Sakatara, and they rule happily with eight chidren. Then they said that they hated Mary Sues...and all these characters coudl bend every single element.
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Post by caesar on Oct 23, 2006 7:15:21 GMT -5
ANNOUNCMENT TO DISTANT HORIZON! THERE WILL BE A SERIES OF SUES ON THE LOOSE, WE MUST EXTERMINATE THEM! Most well known Sues. Mary Sue: Tried to steal Zuko, and Aang and Sokka all in one chapter, she is actually a hideous eight legged spider freak. Gary Stu: Tried to steal Yue, Katara, Meng ( ) and other girls. In truth he is a giant rat, iwth a sticky slimy tail. Fairee Bendalot : SOme muscular, all powerful guy who knows how to bend time dimension, black holes, faces, tongues, sight, smell, mind, soul, light, dark etc...Yet he doesn't know the four elements ;; Azula's clone: Was created when Azula was born, the creators thought that she was a blotch so they redid it and wiped her out. She escaped to Mary-Sue Island, and learned how to bend lightning fire, and is followed by Rei, and Rocki Lee. Rei: So happy upbeat girl who makes everyone else happy, there was a series of events where Aang and co. kept getting into disasters, disastters which she saved them from. Her hair is pink and she knows how to fight with needles. She once trapped Sokka in an...adult...fic...*SHUDDERS OMG THE IMAGES!!!* Rocki Lee: Super loud and flirtatious girl who "marries" Zuko, enslaving him and forcing him to scrub her feet every day and night, yet Zuko is happy. The Author says that "Rocki Lee had 2 big@ss melons on her chest" We have currently in possession Rocki Lee. (Btw these were real Sues by REAL authors...(OMG NICK!!!!) Rocki Lee sat in the papery confinements of her shell. A DH guard, walked through viewing all the trolls and sues, and then walked away. "Hey there cutie-pie!" Rocki Lee called out towards teh guard, he came back and said clearly. "Foolish Sue, your powers are ineffective to me, you're WEAK!" He yelled into the cell. "Aww...but you're just so big and strong...and handsome...why don't you let me out so we could have some... fun" She said with a certain tone. "W-what kind of fun you disgusting worm!" Yhe Guard Yelled. "I was only talking about playing Airball SHEESH!" She said gripping the paper like bars of the jail cell. Her hands were starting to melt, then she found her way out. "Hey guard! You know what? I think your forum and all yoru staff memebers are STUPID!" She scraemed. The guard took out his pencil and jabbed the sue, saying "If we're so stupid why are you the one in the jail cell? AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA!" He laughed, as he MISTed her. "AHHHH YOU'RE HURTING ME!!!" She yelled, then grabbed his pencil adn quickly cut the paper bars with the sharp end. After she was released, Rocki used a dimension portal and threw the guard inside it. Laughing she left the Trash Bin, and headed for...the General Avatar Board...What dangers will she cause? Can you help DH's LAM-S to stop her? Definition. MISTing: TO counter anything about a Mary Sue, with smart sarcasm and humorous jabs. Sounds great! Can you please post me the links?
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Horyo
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Post by Horyo on Oct 25, 2006 1:08:55 GMT -5
I read them a while back, I don't really have access to it, but I'll go look for it if you wnat.
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